Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Shorten and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence (student and part-time worker), then give two concise supporting details (course and graduation date; part-time job). Remove fillers and correct small grammar (e.g., "in June" not "in the June"). Use linking words to connect ideas (and, also).

Example: I am currently a student studying early childhood education, and I will graduate in June this year. I also work part-time as a cashier to gain work experience and support myself financially.

Suggestion: Give a clear, concise statement of workplace and your roles. Use correct job titles and avoid hesitations. Limit to one topic sentence plus 1–2 specific details (what you do and one example).

Example: I work at Popeyes Louisiana Kitchen as a part-time cashier. I also help in the kitchen and occasionally take orders for drive-through customers.

Suggestion: Be more concise and precise: start with a direct opinion, then give one or two clear reasons using linking words (because, so). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Provide a specific example of how colleagues help you.

Example: Yes, it's a good place to work because my colleagues are kind and supportive. For example, when I make a mistake they calmly show me how to fix it and explain the correct procedure.

Suggestion: Avoid repeating earlier points; answer directly then add one distinct supporting reason. Use clear linking words (because, so) and finish the sentence. Keep it to two sentences maximum.

Example: Yes, I like working there because the atmosphere is friendly and my colleagues help me learn. Because of that support, I can focus on improving my skills and enjoying my shifts.

Suggestion: Be clearer and more structured: give one main plan and then a short explanation or additional plan. Avoid vague conditional language and awkward phrasing. Use linking words (first, then). Provide specific goals and timelines if possible.

Example: My main plan is to apply for full-time positions in my field after I graduate so I can gain experience and eventually obtain permanent residence. After settling my job situation, I also plan to visit my home country for a short holiday.

× Well currently I am a student I am studying early childhood education and I am going to graduate in the June this year and as well as I also work as a part time as a cashier.

✓ Well, currently I am a student. I am studying early childhood education and I am going to graduate in June this year. I also work part-time as a cashier.

Run-on sentences and incorrect article usage with 'the June' and awkward wording 'as well as I also' and 'as a part time as a cashier'. Separate sentences and remove 'the' before months. Use 'part-time' as an adjective and simplify phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I am currently working at the Popeyes Louisiana Kitchen uh where my rolls are cashier, kitchen helper and drive to other taker.

✓ I am currently working at Popeyes Louisiana Kitchen, where my roles are cashier, kitchen helper and drive-thru order taker.

Incorrect preposition 'at the Popeyes' is acceptable but 'the' can be omitted for brand name; main errors are word choice: 'rolls' should be 'roles', and 'drive to other taker' is unclear. Use 'drive-thru order taker' for the role. Also add commas and correct spelling. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Yes, definitely it's a good place to work the the employer employees they are working as.

✓ Yes, definitely. It's a good place to work; the employers and employees are supportive.

Original is ungrammatical and repetitive: 'the the employer employees they are working as' has subject-verb and clarity issues. Use correct nouns 'employers and employees' and a verb 'are supportive' to form a clear clause. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× My colleagues are so kind and calm as if I do wrong they always help me to try to make it in a good way.

✓ My colleagues are very kind and calm. If I make a mistake, they always help me to correct it.

Use 'very' instead of 'so' for formality; 'as if I do wrong' is incorrect structure—use conditional 'If I make a mistake'. 'Help me to try to make it in a good way' is awkward; use 'help me to correct it'. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Yes, definitely. I already mentioned before that my colleagues are calm and kind, so whenever I do wrong, they always help me do 'cause the place where the people is not good, then people don't try to focus on the things. So that's why I.

✓ Yes, definitely. I mentioned before that my colleagues are calm and kind, so whenever I make a mistake, they always help me. If the people in a workplace are not good, then employees do not try to focus on their work.

Pronoun and verb issues: 'whenever I do wrong' should be 'whenever I make a mistake'. 'Do 'cause' is informal and unclear. 'The place where the people is not good' has subject-verb agreement and vague pronouns. Clarify meaning and use proper verbs and pronouns. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I would like to say I will apply for my future job as if I can get my future job, I will get my permanent residence as soon as possible.

✓ I would like to say that I will apply for jobs in the future. If I can get a suitable job, I hope to obtain permanent residence as soon as possible.

Mixed conditionals and modal misuse: 'would like to say I will' is awkward—separate desire and future intent. 'As if I can get my future job' is incorrect conditional; use 'If I can get a suitable job'. 'Will get my permanent residence' is better as 'hope to obtain' to express intention. Keep conditional structure clear. Grammar problem type ID: 4

× Moreover, I also like to visit my home country for just one time after that.

✓ Moreover, I would also like to visit my home country once after that.

'For just one time' is awkward; use 'once' or 'one time'. 'I also like to' should be 'I would also like to'. Reorder words for natural English. Grammar problem type ID: 26}]}