Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples with linking words. Avoid filler words (uh) and grammatical errors (listening music -> listening to music; 'feels me relaxation' -> 'helps me relax'). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

Example: I have several hobbies, including painting, listening to music and reading. For example, I often play football with my friends in the evenings because it helps me relax after a busy day. I also enjoy painting on weekends to express my creativity.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct tense (past). Provide specific details and link ideas. Remove hesitations and incomplete sentences. For example, say you rode a bicycle with friends, where you went, and why you enjoyed it. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Example: Yes, when I was a child I loved riding my bicycle. I often invited my friends and we explored nearby parks and quiet streets because it was fun and felt safe. Riding helped me feel relaxed and adventurous.

Suggestion: Use correct grammar and a clear structure: topic sentence + supporting detail. Keep it concise and avoid repetition. Specify what types of books and how your reading habit continues now, using linking words like 'so' or 'therefore'.

Example: Yes, I have enjoyed reading since I was a child. I used to read fairy tales and adventure stories, and now I often read contemporary novels and non-fiction because I like learning new ideas. This habit has continued into adulthood and still relaxes me.

Suggestion: Clarify relationships and correct grammar. Start with a clear statement about shared hobbies, then give a specific example of how your family encourages the hobby. Avoid ambiguous phrases like 'it inherits from my mother'—explain what you mean. Use linking words such as 'for example' or 'because'.

Example: Yes, my father also enjoys reading, so we share that hobby. For example, he often buys books for the family and encourages us to read because he believes it broadens our minds. As a result, I developed a strong interest in reading from an early age.

× Yes, I have several hobbies, uh, such as painting, listening music, reading books and playing games.

✓ Yes, I have several hobbies, such as painting, listening to music, reading books, and playing games.

After 'listening' the preposition 'to' is required to form the gerund phrase 'listening to music'. Additionally, add commas for clarity. Suggestion: learn common verb+preposition collocations (e.g., listen to, look at).

× I really enjoy playing football with my friends at evening time, uh, so it feels me relaxation of time.

✓ I really enjoy playing football with my friends in the evening because it makes me feel relaxed.

Use 'in the evening' rather than 'at evening time'. The verb phrase 'feels me relaxation' is incorrect: use 'makes me feel relaxed' to describe effect on feelings. Suggestion: study common time expressions and causative constructions 'make someone feel ...'. Use adjectives ('relaxed') not nouns ('relaxation') after 'feel'.

× Yes, I have a hobby to ride a bicycle uh, in, uh, when I was a child, so uh, when I am in childhood is I, I called all my friends to ride a bicycle and explore several areas and it feels safe.

✓ When I was a child, I enjoyed riding a bicycle, and I used to call all my friends to ride with me and explore different areas because it felt safe.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses. Use past tense 'was', 'enjoyed', 'used to', and 'felt' to describe childhood habits. Also use 'riding a bicycle' (gerund) and 'ride with me' for clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when describing past routines and use 'used to' for repeated past actions.

× It feels mere relaxation.

✓ It was simply relaxing.

Phrase 'feels mere relaxation' is unnatural. For past context use 'was' and adjective 'relaxing' rather than noun 'relaxation'. Suggestion: choose natural adjective forms and match tense to the context.

× So when I thought uh, in today's time it.

✓ So when I think about it now,

The original is incomplete and mixes tenses. To compare past and present, use 'when I think about it now' to introduce reflection. Suggestion: complete the sentence and maintain consistent tense.

× Yes and yes, and when I was a child, I I like like to reading books.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I liked reading books.

Describing the past requires past tense 'liked' not present 'like'. Use 'reading books' (gerund) without 'to' after 'like'. Remove repetitions. Suggestion: use simple past for past habits and avoid 'to' before gerund after 'like'.

× Now in that time, I always I always enjoy to reading books.

✓ At that time, I always enjoyed reading books.

For past periods use 'at that time' and past tense 'enjoyed'. 'Enjoy' is followed by a gerund without 'to' ('reading books'). Suggestion: use correct time expressions and verb+gerund patterns.

× So I believe that this hobby to reading books is a sense from my childhood which which continuously.

✓ So I believe that this hobby of reading books has continued since my childhood.

Use 'hobby of reading books' (noun phrase), and 'has continued since my childhood' to express continuity. The original repeats words and has incomplete structure. Suggestion: use 'has continued' or 'has lasted' to indicate ongoing activities from past to present.

× Yes, my father have a same hobby uh, to reading books uh is same like me, So I think uh, it inherits from my mother.

✓ Yes, my father has the same hobby of reading books as I do, so I think he inherited it from my mother.

Subject 'my father' is singular and needs 'has' not 'have' (subject-verb agreement). Use 'the same hobby' and 'as I do' for comparison. 'Inherited' is past tense for trait passed down. Suggestion: check singular subjects with singular verbs and use correct comparative structures.

× My always my father always buy 2 buy books for them and uh said that you would read them because it fills me a.

✓ My father always buys books for us and says that we should read them because they are enjoyable.

Use 'buys' for singular subject (subject-verb agreement). Remove repeated words. 'For us' is clearer than 'for them' if referring to family. 'Says that we should read them' matches reported speech. 'It fills me a' is incomplete; use 'they are enjoyable' or 'they bring me joy'. Suggestion: simplify structure, ensure verb agreement, and complete clauses for clear meaning.