Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer, more concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like “uh” and unclear phrases (e.g., “it fails me very Li”). Use correct verb forms and natural expressions (e.g., “I enjoy classical and folk dance,” “dancing helps me relax and feel focused”).

Example: I enjoy dancing, especially classical and folk styles. For example, I practise classical dance most often because it helps me relax and focus; additionally, folk dance connects me to my culture.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence about childhood hobby, then give specific supporting details and use linking words. Correct tense and avoid incomplete sentences. Mention where you learned and a brief example of what you learned to make the answer concrete.

Example: Yes, I enjoyed dancing as a child and it still makes me feel relaxed. When I was young, I mainly learned by watching YouTube tutorials and following online lessons, so I picked up basic steps and rhythms from different dance styles.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and improve grammar and coherence. Start with a concise statement, then explain how you maintained the hobby using linking words (e.g., “because,” “so,” “for example”). Use correct verb forms (e.g., “I preferred learning by watching”) and give one specific example of a style you learned.

Example: Yes, dancing has been my hobby since childhood because I enjoyed copying dancers I watched. For example, I learned basic Bharatanatyam steps by watching performances online, and later I practised modern and folk moves in the same way.

Suggestion: Be more precise and grammatically correct. Give a direct negative answer, then add a specific supporting detail and a linking word to explain how this affects you (e.g., “so I practise alone” or “but I sometimes teach them”). Avoid incomplete endings. Use plural forms correctly (family members).

Example: No, I don’t share this hobby with my family because none of my family members enjoy dancing. As a result, I usually practise alone at home, although sometimes I teach simple steps to my younger cousin.

× Yes, I have a hobby of dancing, I love doing classical and folk dance.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby of dancing; I love doing classical and folk dances.

Use plural 'dances' when referring to more than one type (classical and folk). Also replace comma with semicolon or split into two sentences for clarity.

× But uh most probably I try doing classical dance and it fails me very Li relax and it can help to meditate myself and I always prefer doing dancing.

✓ But I usually try classical dance because it relaxes me and helps me meditate, and I always prefer dancing.

Use 'try classical dance' instead of 'try doing classical dance' for concision, use present simple 'relaxes' for habitual effect (subject-verb agreement), 'helps me meditate' instead of 'help to meditate myself', and 'prefer dancing' is more natural than 'prefer doing dancing'. Remove filler words and correct word order.

× Since childhood I have a hobby of dancing and I feel very relaxed doing any type of dance.

✓ Since childhood I have had a hobby of dancing, and I feel very relaxed when I do any type of dance.

Use present perfect 'have had' to show an action/state from the past continuing to present. Add 'when I do' to make the sentence grammatically complete and natural.

× Majorly when I was a child I learned dancing from watching different kind of videos on YouTube and many online websites and it also.

✓ Mainly when I was a child, I learned to dance by watching different kinds of videos on YouTube and other websites.

Use 'mainly' instead of 'majorly', 'learned to dance' instead of 'learned dancing', 'by watching' is the correct prepositional phrase, plural 'kinds' after 'different', and 'other websites' is clearer than 'many online websites and it also' which is incomplete.

× Yes, the dancing is my hobby that I had since my childhood.

✓ Yes, dancing has been my hobby since childhood.

Omit the definite article 'the' and use present perfect 'has been' for a hobby continuing from childhood. 'Since childhood' does not need 'my' repeated.

× In my childhood when I watched someone doing dance, I also prefer to learning by watching them.

✓ As a child, when I watched someone dance, I preferred to learn by watching them.

Use 'as a child' for natural phrasing, 'watched someone dance' (not 'doing dance'), past tense 'preferred' to match 'watched', and 'learn' (base form) after 'prefer to' or use 'preferred to learn'.

× After that I started watching different kinds of videos and learn different styles.

✓ After that, I started watching different kinds of videos and learning different styles.

Use parallel gerunds 'watching' and 'learning' for coordinated actions, and add a comma after introductory phrase.

× No I don't have a same hobby as my family members because none of my family member like to do dance and I have the only person in my family who love doing dance and I started practicing more and progress my.

✓ No, I don't have the same hobby as my family members because none of my family members like to dance, and I am the only person in my family who loves dancing; I started practicing more and made progress.

Use 'the same' not 'a same'; plural 'family members' consistently; 'like to dance' is correct; 'I am the only person' needed for correct subject; 'who loves dancing' subject-verb agreement; 'started practicing more and made progress' completes the idea and uses correct tense and verb forms.