Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và độ tự nhiên. Tránh lặp từ và sửa cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng (ví dụ: "One of the most hobbies" → "One of my main hobbies"). Dùng các liên từ để kết nối ý (e.g., "because", "so") và rút gọn không cần thiết. Chú ý thì động từ (e.g., "I'm continue" → "I continue") và chọn từ chính xác (e.g., "maintain" thay vì "re maintain"). Hãy giới hạn câu tối đa 3–4 câu, mỗi câu rõ ràng và mạch lạc.

Example: One of my main hobbies is playing football. I have loved it since childhood, and I still play regularly. It keeps me fit and helps me build strength because I train a few times a week.

Suggestion: Cần tránh lặp và ngắt quãng (filler words) để câu mạch lạc hơn. Sửa cấu trúc số nhiều/số ít ("hobbies" vs "hobby"), và phát âm tên người nổi tiếng rõ ràng ("Lionel Messi"). Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về lý do bạn thích cầu thủ đó hoặc một kỷ niệm liên quan để tăng tính phong phú của nội dung.

Example: Yes, football was my favourite hobby as a child. I admired Lionel Messi because of his skill and creativity, and watching his matches inspired me to practice more often.

Suggestion: Cần chỉnh ngữ pháp (động từ, thì) và giảm filler words. Sử dụng cấu trúc mạch lạc: trả lời trực tiếp, giải thích lý do và nêu tần suất. Tránh mâu thuẫn trong cùng một câu ("make me feel tired" vs "to relax")—giải thích rõ ràng là dù mệt nhưng vẫn thấy thư giãn về mặt tinh thần.

Example: Yes, I have been playing video games since childhood. As a kid I would play two or three hours every day; it could be tiring physically, but it helped me relax mentally and unwind after school.

Suggestion: Cần hoàn thiện câu và tránh bỏ dở ý. Dùng thì phù hợp và liên từ để nối câu (e.g., "so", "which"). Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động chung (ví dụ: tần suất, cảm xúc, một kỷ niệm cụ thể) để câu đầy đủ và sinh động hơn.

Example: Yes, my brother and I both love football. When we were children we used to play together at the local field every weekend, which created many memorable moments and brought us closer.

× One of the most hobbies I like is football.

✓ One of the hobbies I like most is football.

The phrase 'most hobbies' is incorrect word order and adjective use. Use 'one of the... most' or 'one of the hobbies I like most' to place 'most' after the clause. Improve by using correct adjective placement: 'one of the hobbies I like most.'

× When I was a child I was passionate in football umm now I'm continue to play football.

✓ When I was a child I was passionate about football and now I continue to play football.

English uses 'passionate about' not 'passionate in'. Also connect clauses with 'and' and use 'continue to play' or 'continue playing'. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'about' and proper conjunctions to join ideas.

× It helps to re maintain my health and improve my strength.

✓ It helps to maintain my health and improve my strength.

The verb 're maintain' is incorrect; remove 're'. 'Helps to + base verb' or 'helps maintain' are correct. Use one infinitive or the base verb consistently: 'helps to maintain'.

× As I mentioned, football is my favorite.

✓ As I mentioned, football is my favorite hobby.

While not strictly ungrammatical, 'favorite' typically needs a noun after it in this context for clarity: 'favorite hobby.' This improves completeness and collocation.

× It's the most favorite hobbies that I have.

✓ It's my favorite hobby.

'Most favorite' is redundant and mixing singular/plural 'hobbies' is wrong. Use 'my favorite hobby' to correct both degree and number.

× Uh, I remember, uh, when I was a child, Messi, Leo Macy is my, uh, famous is my is very famous is, is.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, Messi (Lionel Messi) was my favourite and very famous to me.

The original is fragmented and repetitious. Use simple past 'was' to describe past feelings and remove repetitions. Clarify name 'Lionel Messi' and use coherent sentence structure.

× Yeah, my hobby is playing games.

✓ Yeah, my hobby is playing games.

This sentence is correct as written; present tense describes a current hobby. No change needed.

× Uh, when I was a child, I played a lot for two or three hours a day.

✓ When I was a child, I played a lot for two or three hours a day.

This sentence is correct and uses past tense appropriately to describe habitual past actions. Minor removal of filler 'Uh' improves fluency.

× It's make me feel tired, but however, I continue to playing games to relax.

✓ It made me feel tired, but I continued playing games to relax.

'It's make' is incorrect: use past tense 'It made' to match 'when I was a child.' 'Continue to playing' is ungrammatical; use 'continued playing' or 'continued to play.' Also 'but however' is redundant; use one conjunction.

× Yeah, my brother is very passionate in football.

✓ Yeah, my brother is very passionate about football.

Use the preposition 'about' with 'passionate' not 'in.' This is a common collocation error; replace 'in' with 'about.'

× When I was a child, we often hang out to play in the field.

✓ When I was a child, we often hung out and played in the field.

Tense consistency: use past 'hung out' and 'played' to match 'When I was a child.' Use conjunction 'and' to link actions. This fixes tense and structure.

× It's very memorable and. Uh.

✓ It is very memorable.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains a filler 'Uh'. Remove filler and finish the thought: 'It is very memorable.'