Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., “take the sunlight” → “get some sunlight”).

Example: Yes, I walk a lot. I try to do 7,000 to 10,000 steps a day because it keeps me fit and helps me get some sunlight, which improves my mood.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and irrelevant phrases. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific details (who, when, why). Avoid unclear endings and filler words. Correct unclear phrase like “helpful for making ma'am.”

Example: Yes, I often walked with my grandmother when I was a child. We walked for about two hours each afternoon so I could play outside and get plenty of sunlight, which made me feel healthy and energetic.

Suggestion: Use smoother linking words and correct noun forms (e.g., “parks” or “a park”). Start with a direct answer then add specific reasons with linking phrases like “for example” or “also.” Reduce fillers.

Example: People like walking in parks because they are lively and full of greenery. For example, you often see children playing and people socializing, which makes the atmosphere pleasant and motivates you to walk.

Suggestion: Organize response: give a clear location and then two specific reasons. Correct unclear names and capitalization. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Mentioning approximate time is good — keep it concise.

Example: I would like to take a long walk around the large lake near my home, called Lake Donation. It takes about 45 minutes to circle it and the route is surrounded by trees and peaceful views, which I find relaxing.

Suggestion: Clarify the place name and simplify description. Start with a clear sentence stating where you went, then give two concise details (distance/duration and what you enjoyed). Remove repeated phrasing.

Example: Lately I walked at Parc de la Gorge near Kotticode. I did a one-hour circuit there; it felt like an easy hike through the forest and I enjoyed the scenery and fresh air.

× Yes I do. I try to walk every day around 7000 to 10,000 steps a day. It makes me it keeps me fit and allows me to take the sunlight.

✓ Yes, I do. I try to walk every day, around 7,000 to 10,000 steps. It keeps me fit and allows me to get some sunlight.

Tense and word form: 'It makes me it keeps me fit' contains a redundancy and wrong construction; use a single present-tense verb 'keeps' to show habitual action. 'Allows me to take the sunlight' is unnatural in English; use 'get some sunlight.' Also add commas and format numbers for clarity.

× Yes, I vividly remember when I was a child, I used to go for a walk with my grandma, uh, every day for two hours, uh, specifically in the daytime to get sunlight to play. Uh, it, it was really helpful for making ma'am.

✓ Yes, I vividly remember that when I was a child, I used to go for walks with my grandma every day for about two hours in the daytime to get sunlight and play. It was really helpful for my health.

Past tense/context: Use 'that' instead of an extra comma and make 'go for walks' plural because it was habitual. Remove filler 'uh' and clarify purpose 'to get sunlight and play.' The phrase 'helpful for making ma'am' is unclear/incorrect; likely intended 'helpful for my health' so correct to maintain meaning. Use past tense consistently for past habits.

× From my perspective, Park is a very lively place and has lots of greenery.

✓ From my perspective, the park is a very lively place and has lots of greenery.

Article error: 'Park' refers to a specific place in context, so English requires the definite article 'the park.' Also use lowercase 'park' unless it's a proper name.

× Uh, you can definitely see children playing, laughing and other people enjoying which keeps you motivated to, uh, walk or enjoy the weather.

✓ You can definitely see children playing and laughing, and other people enjoying themselves, which keeps you motivated to walk and enjoy the weather.

Pronoun/reflexive error: 'other people enjoying' needs an object or reflexive pronoun 'themselves' to be grammatically complete. Also improve coordination: separate activities with commas and use 'and' correctly. Remove filler words.

× I really like to take walk around a lake because I am living near a lake.

✓ I really like to take walks around a lake because I live near one.

Verb form/tense: 'to take walk' is incorrect; use 'take walks' or 'go for a walk.' 'I am living' is a stative situation better expressed as simple present 'I live.' Also avoid repeating 'a lake' twice; use 'one.'

× It's lake donation. It's a very Big Lake and it takes around 45, uh, minutes to take a walk around the lake. It's it has greenery.

✓ It's called Lake Donation. It's a very big lake and it takes around 45 minutes to walk around it. It has a lot of greenery.

Sentence structure and capitalization: Proper noun needs 'called' to introduce the name. 'Big' should be lowercase. Simplify 'takes around 45 minutes to take a walk around the lake' to 'takes around 45 minutes to walk around it.' Remove repeated fragments 'It's it' and clarify 'has a lot of greenery.'

× I went to Parc de la Gorge which is near Koticoke and it is a it is a kind of a hiking but it's plain so I would consider it as a walking there.

✓ I went to Parc de la Gorge, which is near Koticoke. It is a kind of hiking area, but it's fairly flat, so I would consider it suitable for walking.

Past tense/structure: Split into clearer sentences. Remove duplicate 'it is a it is a.' Use 'hiking area' for clarity and 'fairly flat' instead of 'plain.' 'Consider it as a walking there' is ungrammatical; use 'consider it suitable for walking.'

× I had a big circuit there which was around one hour and we enjoyed the forest.

✓ I did a long circuit there that took around one hour, and we enjoyed the forest.

Number/word choice: 'had a big circuit' is unnatural; use 'did a long circuit' or 'walked a large circuit.' Use 'that took' for duration. Maintain past tense 'did'/'took' to match context.