Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation words, and use correct tense and plural forms. Add one brief supporting detail using a linking word. Focus on natural phrasing and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes. I live in Abbotsford, which doesn’t have many tall buildings. However, when I visit Vancouver I see many skyscrapers and enjoy photographing their views.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and improve vocabulary accuracy. Give one clear reason and an example, linked logically. Use fewer filler words and vary word choices (architecture, details, textures).

Example: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I find their architecture fascinating. For example, I like capturing the intricate facades of historic buildings and then sharing the best shots on my social media.

Suggestion: Clarify and complete your answer: state one specific building you want to visit, give clear facts and explain why. Use proper sentence structure and avoid contradictions (e.g., "I've never visited" vs "there are a number"). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Example: Yes. I would like to visit the downtown Vancouver public library because I haven’t been there yet. It is a seven-storey building, with six floors of books and an impressive seventh-floor atrium that I’ve seen in photos and want to see in person.

Suggestion: Make your reason concise and specific, and remove repetition. Provide one concrete example of what you would enjoy seeing and use linking words for coherence.

Example: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building so I could enjoy panoramic city views. For example, in winter I imagine watching the fog and snow from my window, which would feel peaceful and beautiful.

× But whenever I go to like uh, Vancouver, I saw a lot of tall buildings and enjoy the enjoy the view of them and capture the photos of them.

✓ But whenever I go to Vancouver, I see a lot of tall buildings, enjoy the view of them, and take photos of them.

The sentence mixes past tense 'saw' with present tense 'go' and 'enjoy'. Use present simple for habitual actions (go, see, enjoy, take). Remove filler words and duplicate phrases for clarity.

× Yes, I do because I love to capture the photos and the like, uh, when, uh, as, uh, it is, some buildings are very interesting, like there, uh, their architect.

✓ Yes, I do because I love taking photos when some buildings are very interesting, for example their architecture.

Awkward pronoun and phrase use: 'the like', 'it is', 'there, uh, their architect' are incorrect. Use gerund 'taking photos' after 'love' and replace 'their architect' with 'their architecture' to refer to building design.

× And that's why I really like to take the photos and I post them on my social media.

✓ And that's why I really like taking photos and posting them on my social media.

After 'like' and for parallel actions, use gerunds ('taking', 'posting') for smooth, idiomatic expression rather than 'to take' plus 'I post' which breaks parallelism.

× Although there are number of buildings where I really like to visit, but I've never visited ever.

✓ Although there are a number of buildings I would really like to visit, I have never visited them.

Missing article 'a' before 'number' and misuse of tense and redundancy 'never visited ever'. Also 'where I really like to visit' is awkward; use 'I would really like to visit' and include object 'them' to refer to buildings.

× So for example, I really like to visit at the uh library, which is in the Vancouver downtown.

✓ For example, I would really like to visit the library in downtown Vancouver.

Do not use 'visit at' with places; use 'visit' plus the place. 'the Vancouver downtown' should be 'downtown Vancouver' and include the definite article 'the' for 'library'.

× So it is 7 story building and the UH-6, uh, six floors are for the books, but the 7th floor is very interesting because we're.

✓ It is a seven-story building; six floors are for books, but the seventh floor is very interesting because...

Use 'a' before singular noun, write 'seven-story' as adjective, use 'seven' not '7' in formal speech, and remove unclear filler 'we're'. Also 'floors are for the books' should be 'floors are for books'.

× Yes, I really want to live in a tall building from where I can see the whole view of the cities, because, for example, in the snowy, snowy season, it is very like a foggy season.

✓ Yes, I really want to live in a tall building from where I can see the whole city, because, for example, in the snowy season it is often foggy.

Use 'city' (singular) with 'whole' and avoid repetition 'snowy, snowy'. Replace 'it is very like a foggy season' with 'it is often foggy' for correct idiomatic expression.

× It is very interesting to see the foggy like, uh, the weather as as if I live in a tall building, I can watch the view, which is well.

✓ It would be interesting to see the foggy weather; if I lived in a tall building, I could enjoy the view.

The original is ungrammatical and has mixed conditional forms. Use a conditional: 'If I lived..., I could...' or 'It would be interesting...' Remove filler words and correct 'which is well' to a clear conclusion 'I could enjoy the view'.