Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), correct countable/uncountable usage (many vs much), and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word if you add more information.

Example: Yes, I live near the city centre, but there are not many tall buildings. For example, most structures are two- to four-storey apartments rather than skyscrapers, so the skyline is relatively low.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer and explain with specific conditions. Remove hesitations and repetitive phrases. Use a linking word (however/only when) to connect the condition.

Example: No, I don't usually photograph buildings. However, when I visit a famous site or an architecturally interesting place, I will take pictures to remember the visit.

Suggestion: Be specific and accurate with details and vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and name precise activities (e.g., "skying" -> "skywalk" or "dining in the tower"). Use one or two supporting details linked logically.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the CN Tower in Toronto because it is one of the tallest observation towers. I want to try the edgeWalk and enjoy the panoramic city views from the observation deck.

Suggestion: Answer directly and provide two clear, specific reasons connected with linking words (for example, "because" and "for instance"). Avoid unfinished sentences and hesitations; finish the thought with a result or example.

Example: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because they tend to be crowded and noisy. For example, when I worked as a security supervisor in high-rise flats, residents often complained about limited living space and privacy issues.

× Well, I'm living uh, in around the city center and, uh, there are not that much tall buildings even though there are couple of apartments.

✓ Well, I live around the city centre, and there are not that many tall buildings even though there are a couple of apartment buildings.

Errors: incorrect progressive usage 'I'm living' (use simple present for habitual/state), wrong preposition 'in around' (use 'around'), quantifier and noun agreement 'not that much tall buildings' (use 'many' with countable plural), missing article 'a couple of' and unclear noun 'apartments' (use 'a couple of apartment buildings' or 'a couple of apartments'). Suggestion: Use simple present for location/habitual states, use 'around' without 'in', use 'many' with countable nouns, include articles where needed.

× No, generally I take pictures myself or some landscapes, not for buildings, uh, but if I really visit, uh, on special sites, maybe on that time I can take pictures of buildings as well, especially just to, to, just to.

✓ No, generally I take pictures of myself or of landscapes, not of buildings, but if I visit special sites, maybe at that time I can take pictures of buildings as well.

Errors: missing preposition 'of' after 'pictures' when indicating object; awkward 'on special sites' (use 'at' or omit 'on'); incorrect time phrase 'on that time' (use 'at that time'). Suggestion: Use 'pictures of' to show the subject of the photo, use 'visit special sites' or 'visit a site', and use 'at that time' for referring to a specific moment.

× Yes, definitely. Uh, there is a building which is a CN Tower in Toronto that I really want to visit because it's a high rise building and I really want to experience uh, that tallest building.

✓ Yes, definitely. There is a building, the CN Tower in Toronto, that I really want to visit because it's a high-rise building and I really want to experience that tall building.

Errors: unnecessary relative clause 'which is a CN Tower' (use apposition 'the CN Tower'); 'high rise' should be hyphenated 'high-rise' as a compound adjective; 'that tallest building' is incorrect: 'tallest' is a superlative and needs a comparison group or 'the' (the tallest). Here 'that tall building' or 'the tallest building' would be correct depending on meaning. Suggestion: Use apposition for well-known names, hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns, and choose correct adjective form ('tall' vs 'tallest').

× I want to do some uh, activities over there such as, uh, skying and uh, all.

✓ I want to do some activities there such as skiing and so on.

Errors: 'skying' is misspelled; gerund 'skiing' is correct. 'Over there' can be simplified to 'there.' 'and all' is informal; use 'and so on' or 'and other activities.' Suggestion: Use correct gerund spelling 'skiing' and prefer clearer phrases like 'and other activities' or 'and so on.'

× No, I don't want to live in a tall building because, uh, earlier I worked as a security supervisor and I worked in tall buildings, but there are more, uh, problems as compared to living in houses such as there are more people living in, umm, small areas and, uh, they are facing.

✓ No, I don't want to live in a tall building because earlier I worked as a security supervisor in tall buildings, and there were more problems compared to living in houses, such as more people living in small spaces and the problems they faced.

Errors: awkward tense and redundancy: 'earlier I worked... and I worked' should be combined; 'there are more problems' should match past experience with past tense 'there were more problems.' 'small areas' is better as 'small spaces.' sentence ends incomplete 'they are facing' should be 'they faced' or 'they were facing' to complete the idea. Suggestion: Combine repeated verbs, keep tense consistent when referring to past experience, use 'small spaces' for living quarters, and complete clauses describing issues.