Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and unnecessary repetition.

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel because I love nature. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes like fields or forests, and I find that soft music in the car makes the experience more relaxing.

Suggestion: Provide a concise topic sentence, use linking words, and give one specific example. Remove repetition and finish the sentence clearly.

Example: Yes, I often take photos from the car because I'm interested in photography. For instance, if I see a striking mountain or a calm lake, I quickly take a photo on my phone so I can edit it later and remember the view.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first, then explain briefly with clear reasons and a smooth linking phrase. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences; finish your thought with a specific concluding remark.

Example: I prefer the sea because I used to be afraid of water, but after my mother encouraged me to learn swimming I grew to enjoy it. For example, I now love swimming and relaxing by the shore, and I enjoy both calm bays and the sound of waves on the beach.

× Yes, I do look out of the window while traveling because I'm a nature loving person so I love to look at the scenery.

✓ Yes, I do look out the window while travelling because I'm a nature-loving person, so I love to look at the scenery.

Replace 'look out of the window' with 'look out the window' for natural English; hyphenate 'nature-loving' as a compound adjective; add a comma before 'so' to join independent clauses. Suggestion: use consistent British spelling 'travelling' if other British forms are used. The error is an incorrect or unnatural prepositional phrase and missing hyphenation for a compound adjective.

× Uh, especially when there is a light music going on in the car.

✓ Uh, especially when there is light music playing in the car.

'Music' is uncountable and does not need the definite article 'a'. Replace 'going on' with 'playing' for natural collocation. Suggestion: use 'light music' or 'soft music' without 'a'. This is an article usage error and collocation choice.

× Yes, as I mentioned before I'm a nature loving person and also I have keen interest in photography so I just love to capture nature.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned before, I'm a nature-loving person and I also have a keen interest in photography, so I love to capture nature.

Add commas for clarity, hyphenate 'nature-loving', include the article 'a' before 'keen interest', and remove redundant 'just'. Suggestion: include 'a' with 'keen interest' and keep sentence concise. Errors include missing article and punctuation, and pronoun placement for clarity.

× So whenever I I see beautiful landscapes or mountains or sea or or lake I just try to capture it in the photos in the in my camera so I can.

✓ So whenever I see beautiful landscapes, mountains, the sea, or a lake, I try to capture them with my camera.

Remove duplicate 'I', add commas to separate items, use 'the sea' and 'a lake' for natural reference, change 'it' to 'them' to agree with plural 'landscapes' and 'mountains', and use 'with my camera' instead of 'in the photos in the in my camera'. Remove trailing 'so I can' which is incomplete. Suggestion: keep subject-verb agreement and clear object references. Errors include sentence structure, plural agreement, and awkward prepositional phrases.

× But I, I prefer sea because, umm, initially I was a hydrophobic person, but a few years before, like my mother just imposed me to learn swimming.

✓ But I prefer the sea because, initially, I was afraid of water, but a few years ago my mother made me learn to swim.

Use 'the sea' with definite article; 'hydrophobic person' is unnatural—use 'afraid of water'; 'a few years before' should be 'a few years ago'; 'imposed me to learn' is incorrect—use 'made me learn to swim' or 'encouraged me to learn to swim'. Also remove filler repetitions. Suggestion: choose natural verbs ('made' or 'encouraged') and correct time expressions. Errors include preposition/article misuse and incorrect verb use.

× And after learning swimming, umm, I just love water.

✓ And after learning to swim, I grew to love the water.

Use 'learning to swim' rather than 'learning swimming'. 'Love water' is awkward; use 'love the water' or 'grew to love the water' to indicate change. Suggestion: use infinitive after 'learn' and include article with 'water' when referring generally to bodies of water. Errors: incorrect verb pattern and article usage.

× Whether it's a steady water, running water, whether it's a sea, it's a.

✓ Whether it's still water or running water, whether it's the sea or a river, I enjoy it.

'Steady water' is unnatural; use 'still water'. Complete the sentence—original trails off. Use 'the sea' and 'a river' or 'a lake' depending on meaning. Suggestion: finish thoughts and choose conventional adjectives for water types. Errors include incorrect adjective choice and incomplete sentence.