Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, avoid hesitations and correct small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct vocabulary (e.g., 'view' not 'few') and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car. For example, when I drive with my family I enjoy watching the changing landscape, especially countryside views, because it helps me relax.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct grammar (e.g., 'as a passenger'). Reduce filler words and give a specific example using linking words. Mention what you photograph and why, in 2–3 concise sentences.

Example: I don't take photos while I'm driving, but as a passenger I often take pictures of mountains and beaches. For instance, last summer I photographed a coastal sunset because the colours were beautiful.

Suggestion: State your preference clearly, then give one clear, specific reason using linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I prefer the mountains' and 'fresh air') and avoid repetitions and hesitations.

Example: I prefer the mountains because I find them more relaxing. For example, when I go camping and climb a mountain I enjoy the fresh air and peaceful atmosphere, which helps me unwind.

× Yes, of course, because, uh, when I'm traveling, uh, with my friends or my family, usually I'm driving uh, so I can see the few when I'm driving the car.

✓ Yes, of course, because when I'm traveling with my friends or my family, usually they drive, so I can see the view from the car.

Original sentence has subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference issues: 'usually I'm driving' conflicts with context (student is passenger) and 'the few' is a wrong word choice. Change to 'they drive' to match plural subject 'friends or family' and 'view' for scenery. Also remove unnecessary fillers and duplicate 'when I'm driving the car'. Suggestion: state the subject clearly and use the correct noun 'view'. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× Uh, I can't take a photo when I'm driving, but when I'm as a passengers, usually I'm taking a photo like, uh, Mountain View and then C and beach.

✓ I can't take a photo when I'm driving, but when I'm a passenger, I usually take photos of mountain views, cities, and beaches.

Errors include wrong article and plural forms for 'passenger' and 'photos', incorrect verb tense/aspect 'I'm taking' (awkward for habitual action), and unclear nouns ('C' likely meant 'city'). Change 'when I'm as a passengers' to 'when I'm a passenger', use simple present 'I usually take' for habitual actions, pluralize 'photos' and use clear nouns 'mountain views, cities, and beaches'. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I prefer to choose mountain because when I'm, uh, climb a mountain camping, uh, I can feel relax, I can, uh, feel a good air.

✓ I prefer the mountains because when I go mountain climbing or camping, I can feel relaxed and enjoy the fresh air.

Multiple issues: article and noun form ('prefer to choose mountain' -> 'prefer the mountains' or 'prefer mountains'), verb form and structure ('when I'm climb a mountain camping' -> 'when I go mountain climbing or camping'), adjective/adverb errors ('feel relax' -> 'feel relaxed'), and collocation ('good air' -> 'fresh air'). Use gerund 'mountain climbing' or 'go climbing' and correct adjective 'relaxed'. Grammar problem type ID: 22