Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Shorten and clarify the response. Begin with a direct topic sentence, avoid hesitations and wrong words (e.g., “knives”), and give one specific reason with a linking word. Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I like watching changing landscapes because they help me relax and make long journeys feel shorter.

Suggestion: Good direct answer and reason. Improve by adding a linking word and a specific detail about how or when you take photos. Keep it concise and natural (avoid formal words like “indeed” if they sound unnatural).

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I’m collecting pictures for an album. For instance, I usually take shots during sunset or when I spot interesting landscapes to remember the trip.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “also”). Avoid repeating similar adjectives; choose precise vocabulary and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains because it feels more relaxing and offers a wider range of activities. For example, I can swim, go boating, or relax on the beach, which I find more enjoyable than hiking.

× Oh, I love to look at the window when traveling by bus or car because looking at knives, nice views every day is, uh, making me feel more great.

✓ Oh, I love to look out the window when traveling by bus or car because looking at the nice views every day makes me feel much better.

Problems: incorrect word choice and adjective/adverb use. 'look at the window' should be 'look out the window' to indicate viewing scenery. 'looking at knives' is likely a slip and incorrect; removed. 'more great' is ungrammatical—use 'much better' or 'great' depending on meaning. Also 'is, uh, making me feel' is awkward; use simple present 'makes me feel' for habitual action. Suggestion: use correct prepositional phrase 'look out', avoid unintended words, and use comparative adverb phrases like 'much better' for improvement.

× Indeed, I do take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I'd love to create an album of this beautiful view and scenes.

✓ Indeed, I do take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I'd love to create an album of these beautiful views and scenes.

Problem: noun number and modifier agreement with implied present participle structure. 'this beautiful view and scenes' mixes singular 'this' and plural 'scenes'; use 'these beautiful views and scenes' to match plural nouns. Also 'scenery' and 'views/scenes' are redundant; consider 'these beautiful scenes' or 'this beautiful scenery'. Suggestion: keep number agreement between demonstrative and nouns.

× I prefer both mountains and sea, but I do actually love the sea better because it's just so relaxing and enjoyable and more fun.

✓ I prefer both the mountains and the sea, but I actually prefer the sea because it's so relaxing and more fun.

Problems: article and wordiness. 'both mountains and sea' needs articles 'the mountains and the sea' when speaking about these general categories. 'I do actually love the sea better' is wordy; 'I actually prefer the sea' is clearer. 'so relaxing and more fun' is acceptable but 'more fun' needs a comparison target; using 'more fun' after 'prefer' is fine. Suggestion: add definite articles for general categories and simplify phrasing.

× You can have more activities there more than the mountains.

✓ You can do more activities there than in the mountains.

Problems: incorrect preposition and word order. 'have more activities there more than the mountains' is ungrammatical. Use 'do more activities there than in the mountains' or 'there are more activities there than in the mountains.' Use 'in the mountains' to indicate location. Suggestion: place comparative clause after 'than' and use correct preposition 'in' for mountains.