Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: もっと自然で正確な英文を心がけ、主語・動詞の一致や語彙の選択を改善してください。具体的には、最初に簡潔なトピック文を置き、その後に1〜2文で理由や具体例を述べてください。例えば「enjoy the viewing」や「enjoy the building」は不自然なので、それぞれ「enjoy looking at the scenery」「looking at buildings」などに置き換えましょう。また、文をつなぐ際は接続詞（for example, and）を使って論理の流れを明確にしてください。

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy looking at the passing scenery, especially city streets and interesting buildings. For example, I like spotting old houses and modern skyscrapers when I travel with my friends.

Suggestion: 語彙の誤用（scanner→scenery）や文法（冠詞・語順・時制）に注意しましょう。答えは簡潔にし、理由や頻度を補足する際は接続語（but, however, so）でつなげ、具体例を加えると良いです。また、冗長な表現を避け、一文を短くして明瞭に伝えてください。

Example: Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the car window. However, the window is often dirty, so the pictures don't always look good.

Suggestion: 理由を述べるときは論理的に整理し、不要な語句を減らしてください。例えば「the sea is cool for me to watching」は不自然なので「I find the sea refreshing to look at」などに直しましょう。対比を示す場合は“although”や“but”を使い、山の良さを簡潔に補足するとバランスが良くなります。語数は3〜5文に収めてください。

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I enjoy swimming and find the sea refreshing to look at. However, I also like the mountains for their peaceful hiking trails and fresh air.

× Usually I enjoy the viewing on the bus or the car and also I enjoy the building with my friends.

✓ Usually I enjoy looking at the scenery from the bus or the car, and I also enjoy sightseeing with my friends.

'Enjoy' is followed by a gerund (verb+ -ing). 'the viewing' and 'the building' are incorrect collocations: use 'looking at' or 'watching' for scenery and 'sightseeing' for visiting places. Also 'from the bus or the car' is more natural than 'on the bus or the car'. Suggestion: use 'enjoy' + gerund and choose natural collocations: 'enjoy looking at the scenery' and 'enjoy sightseeing'.

× Sometimes I take photos of the scanner outside the car window, but also sometimes window is dirty so it's not beautiful photos and I get.

✓ Sometimes I take photos of the scenery outside the car window, but sometimes the window is dirty, so the photos are not beautiful.

'Scanner' is the wrong word; the correct noun is 'scenery'. Sentence structure and articles are incorrect: 'sometimes window is dirty' needs the article 'the' and subject-verb agreement, and 'it's not beautiful photos and I get' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'the photos are not beautiful.' Suggestion: use correct vocabulary ('scenery'), include articles ('the window'), and use clear subject-verb structure ('the photos are not beautiful').

× I like the sea more than the mountains because I can enjoy swimming in the sea and the sea is cool for me to watching but also I like the mountains.

✓ I prefer the sea to the mountains because I can enjoy swimming in it, and the sea is relaxing to watch, but I also like the mountains.

Use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'like A more than B' for a concise comparison (both are acceptable; here changed for naturalness). 'The sea is cool for me to watching' is incorrect: use 'relaxing to watch' or 'nice to look at.' 'Swimming in the sea' is fine but 'in it' avoids repetition. Also maintain parallel structure and proper verb forms ('to watch' not 'to watching'). Suggestion: use correct comparative phrasing and infinitive form after 'to' ('to watch'), or restructure to use gerund properly ('enjoy watching').