Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and organize your response: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct basic grammar (tense and article use). Aim for 2–3 sentences, e.g. mention where you travel, what you saw, and how it made you feel.

Example: Yes. When I travel to Lahore by bus, I often look out of the window because the countryside is beautiful. For example, I saw gardens full of mango trees and green fields, which made the journey feel peaceful.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer first, then one specific reason or short example. Use correct verb forms and simple linking words (but, because, so). Avoid unnecessary repetition and incorrect phrasing.

Example: Sometimes I do, but only briefly because the bus is moving fast. For instance, I once reached for my phone to take a photo but by the time I unlocked it the bus had already passed the view.

Suggestion: State your preference clearly in one sentence, then add a specific reason with linking words (because, so, for example). Reduce repetition and use correct singular/plural and prepositions.

Example: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy quiet, natural landscapes. For example, I like spending vacations in northern Pakistan where the mountains are peaceful and there are beautiful hiking trails.

× Yes, basically I'm traveling in a bus when I'm going to Lahore.

✓ Yes, basically I travel by bus when I go to Lahore.

Use simple present for habitual actions. 'I'm traveling' and 'when I'm going' are present continuous which imply current ongoing actions; replace with 'I travel' and 'I go' for routines.

× Certainly I saw from the window of the bus that scenery was very good.

✓ Certainly I saw from the bus window that the scenery was very good.

Use 'the scenery' with the definite article for specific scenery viewed. Also 'the bus window' is the natural word order; 'from the bus window' is better than 'from the window of the bus'.

× Basically that was that was a garden that was a garden with full of trees of mango and the the mango trees fulfill of.

✓ Basically it was a garden full of mango trees.

Reduce repetition and use correct article and preposition: 'a garden' is correct, 'full of' takes the noun directly: 'full of mango trees'. 'Trees of mango' and 'fulfill of' are incorrect word orders and forms.

× Yep, I will try it a little bit.

✓ Yes, I would try it a little bit.

Context is speaking about a past attempt during the trip; 'will' is future; 'would' reports a past intention or polite offer. If meaning future, 'I will try it a little bit' is acceptable, but given the rest of the narration, 'would' fits better.

× But since basically a bus was bus was running on the road.

✓ But the bus was running on the road.

Remove repetition and use simple past continuous to describe an ongoing past action. 'Since basically' is unnecessary and clumsy here.

× So that was best for me.

✓ So that was best for me.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; it uses past tense 'was' with singular subject 'that'. No change needed. (Kept as is.)

× Basically when I I when I put my hand in my pocket to bring out my mobile and then bus is went away.

✓ Basically, when I put my hand in my pocket to take out my mobile, the bus drove away.

Correct verb forms and order: 'take out' is more natural than 'bring out' for removing from pocket. 'The bus drove away' uses simple past for the completed action; 'bus is went away' is ungrammatical (mixes present 'is' with past 'went').

× So the city was missed from my side.

✓ So I missed seeing the city.

Use active voice and correct verb 'missed' with object: 'I missed seeing the city' or 'the city was out of sight' are clearer. 'Missed from my side' is unnatural.

× It's not, it's not a major time, but sometime I sometime I want to spend my my whole time like vacation in in northern areas of Pakistan

✓ It is not a major thing, but sometimes I want to spend my whole vacation in the northern areas of Pakistan.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) and 'thing' instead of 'time' for the idea. Remove repetitions and use 'vacation' as a noun; 'in the northern areas' needs the definite article 'the'.

× that areas were fulfilled of that areas were fulfilled of mountains and it was very that was very peaceful places that was that places are.

✓ Those areas were full of mountains and they were very peaceful places.

Use 'those' for plural demonstrative, 'full of' for being filled, and correct plural agreement: 'they were very peaceful places.' Remove repetition and correct word order.