Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition (e.g., don’t repeat “something” and “stuff”). Also choose more precise vocabulary (e.g., “new places,” “interesting buildings,” “countryside”).

Example: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I enjoy spotting new buildings and different landscapes that I don’t have at home, which makes the journey more interesting and helps me notice things I hadn’t discovered before.

Suggestion: Start with a direct affirmative sentence, then give one clear reason and a short example. Avoid vague phrases like “new stuff” and simplify grammar (e.g., use ‘post online’ not ‘post it on online’). Keep sentences concise and avoid redundancy about memory and posting unless you add distinct details.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside. I usually post the best pictures online to share my trip with friends, and I also keep them on my phone as memories to look back on later.

Suggestion: Give a clear preference or explain you like both, but state reasons in a compact, grammatical way. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., “crisp air,” “rustling leaves,” “soothing waves”) and avoid repetition or filler words. Limit to two or three short sentences with linking words like ‘because’ or ‘and’.

Example: I like both the mountains and the sea because they offer different kinds of relaxation. In the mountains, I enjoy the crisp air and rustling leaves, while the sea soothes me with its waves and salty smell.

× Yes, I do, because I can see some stuff that I haven't seen in our place because everything is something new for me and it makes me see that there are things that I haven't discovered.

✓ Yes, I do, because I can see some things I haven't seen in my hometown; everything is new to me, and it shows me that there are things I haven't discovered yet.

The original uses 'stuff' and 'our place' imprecisely and repeats 'because'. Replace 'stuff' with 'things' for formality and clarity, use 'my hometown' (or 'where I live') instead of 'our place' to match perspective, and add 'yet' to indicate incomplete discovery. Also streamline clauses to avoid repetition and improve flow.

× Yes, because I can post it on online to let the people know that I have seen new stuff on my day and make it feel nostalgic memory on my phone so that I can look back and think that these are the scenery that I have seen when I was traveling.

✓ Yes, because I can post them online to let people know that I saw new things during my day and keep nostalgic memories on my phone so I can look back and remember the scenery I saw while traveling.

Use 'post them online' (not 'on online') and plural 'them' to match 'photos'. Use 'people' without 'the'. Use 'during my day' or 'that day' instead of 'on my day'. 'Make it feel nostalgic memory' is awkward; use 'keep nostalgic memories'. Change 'when I was traveling' to 'while traveling' for correct adverbial clause.

× I prefer both because the mountains can give you some chilling winds and very relaxing rusty leaves and those ocean can make your the your heart feels so relaxed too because of the waves and the smell of the sea water.

✓ I like both because the mountains can give you cool breezes and relaxing rustling leaves, and the ocean can also make your heart feel relaxed because of the waves and the smell of the seawater.

Errors include plural/singular mismatch and awkward phrases. Use 'breezes' instead of 'winds' for naturalness, 'rustling leaves' instead of 'rusty leaves', and 'the ocean' (singular) not 'those ocean'. Remove duplicated 'the your'. Use 'seawater' as one word or 'the sea'/'the sea's smell'. Adjust verb 'feels' to 'feel' to agree with 'your heart' as subject complement.