Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitation and correct small grammar errors; make answer slightly more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler like “uh,” use correct articles and word forms (e.g., “an unusual”), and add one specific example to support why you enjoy photographing views.

Example: Yes, I do. When I see an unusual or beautiful view I feel peaceful and relaxed, so I often photograph it. For example, last month I photographed a misty river at sunrise and posted it on Instagram to share that calm moment with my family and friends.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct conflicting ideas (urban vs rural) and improve vocabulary and sentence structure. Give a clear topic sentence stating preference, then explain with coherent reasons using linking words (for example, because, such as). Avoid contradictory adjectives (urban isn’t usually described as lush).

Example: I prefer rural views because they tend to be more peaceful and green. For example, I enjoy watching sunrises over green fields and quiet villages, which helps me relax after a busy week.

Suggestion: Improve clarity, grammar and organization. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, correct plural and article mistakes (e.g., “different views in different countries”), and provide a concise reason with a specific example. Avoid vague phrasing like “a fuller world” and reduce repetition.

Example: I prefer views in my own country, India, because I find them calmer and less crowded than many places abroad. For instance, I can visit a quiet riverside or rural hill early in the morning and enjoy the scenery without the rush found in busy foreign cities.

× Yes I do, when I uh, see a unusual or a beautiful view, I feel peaceful and relaxed.

✓ Yes, I do. When I see an unusual or a beautiful view, I feel peaceful and relaxed.

The indefinite article 'a' should be 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound (unusual). Also the original contains run-on phrasing; adding punctuation improves clarity ('Yes, I do.' and capitalizing 'When').

× So I like to capture it and upload it on Instagram to share the scene with my family or friends.

✓ So I like to capture it and upload it to Instagram to share the scene with my family and friends.

Use 'to Instagram' rather than 'on Instagram' for the action of uploading; both can be used but 'to' is more natural here. Also use 'and' instead of 'or' when indicating both groups are included. No tense change needed.

× I prefer views in urban areas because the scenery is usually more peaceful and lush.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the scenery is usually more peaceful and lush.

The student's intended contrast was urban vs rural. Saying 'prefer views in urban areas because... more peaceful' is contradictory; likely they meant 'rural areas' are more peaceful. This is a content correction to match logic rather than pure grammar.

× For example, I enjoy watching beautiful sunrise, sunsets, green fields, which feels very relaxing after a busy week.

✓ For example, I enjoy watching beautiful sunrises, sunsets, and green fields, which feel very relaxing after a busy week.

Use plural nouns 'sunrises' and include 'and' in a list. The relative clause refers to plural nouns, so verb should be 'feel' not 'feels'. Also parallel list structure required.

× In a fuller world, there is a very different, different views in a different countries.

✓ In a fuller world, there are very different views in different countries.

Subject-verb agreement: 'views' is plural so use 'are' instead of 'is'. Remove duplicate 'different' and use 'countries' without 'a'. Also 'a fuller world' is awkward but kept; consider 'a fuller world' -> 'a bigger world' for clarity.

× There's so much beautiful views in other countries also in my countries also.

✓ There are so many beautiful views in other countries and in my country too.

'So much' with countable noun 'views' should be 'so many'. Use 'are' for plural 'views'. Use singular 'country' for 'my country' and place 'too' or 'also' appropriately. Avoid repeating 'also'.

× But I would prefer India because in other countries I would say there is very rush and India we can see a view very peacefully.

✓ But I would prefer India because in other countries there is a lot of rush, and in India we can enjoy views very peacefully.

Use 'there is a lot of rush' or better 'there is a lot of hustle' to express crowding; 'very rush' is incorrect. Add 'in' before 'India' in the second clause. Use plural 'views' and verb 'enjoy' to sound natural. Also separate clauses with a comma and conjunction 'and'.