Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is short, unclear and has incorrect word choices. Give a direct topic sentence, then one or two supporting details using clear vocabulary. Use linking words (for example, because, and, so) and avoid vague phrases like "different phrases free."

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of various views because photography helps me capture special moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines when I travel, since the light and colors change so much and make each shot unique.

Suggestion: The answer is confusing and off-topic. Start with a clear preference (urban or rural), then give specific reasons and a linking word. Avoid mentioning unrelated names or fragments. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: I prefer rural views because I enjoy peaceful landscapes and natural scenery. For instance, I like wide fields and forests where I can relax and take unobstructed photos, and the lack of traffic makes the experience more enjoyable.

Suggestion: Your answer has good content but is grammatically inaccurate and hesitates. Begin with a clear statement of preference, then give specific supporting details and examples, using linking words like "because" or "for example." Correct grammar (e.g., "my country's scenery is beautiful"), and avoid filler words (uh, so).

Example: I prefer views in my own country because its scenery and cultural sites are very beautiful. For example, where I live in Kyoto there are many traditional buildings and temples, and walking through historic streets gives me a strong sense of history and atmosphere.

× Yeah, taking pictures and different phrases free. Fascinating.

✓ Yeah, I like taking pictures of different places for free. It's fascinating.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Taking pictures and different phrases free' mixes nouns and words incorrectly. This is a sentence structure error (problem type 26). I corrected by adding the subject and verb 'I like', specifying 'taking pictures of different places', interpreting 'free' as 'for free' if intended, and turning 'Fascinating.' into a complete clause 'It's fascinating.' Suggestion: always include a clear subject and verb and keep related words together to express a single idea.

× I like the views in Glorious Years or because I love The Quiet Place.

✓ I like views of bustling cities because I love quiet places.

The original mixes possible titles or phrases 'Glorious Years' and 'The Quiet Place' in a way that doesn't answer the question and creates sentence structure problems (type 26). It may also misuse proper nouns. I rewrote it to contrast 'bustling cities' and 'quiet places' which matches the examiner's ask about urban or rural preferences. Suggestion: directly state preference (urban or rural) and give a clear reason; avoid ambiguous proper nouns unless they are intended.

× I love my country's beautiful, especially in Kyoto I live in now.

✓ I love my country's beauty, especially Kyoto, where I live now.

The phrase 'my country's beautiful' uses an adjective where a noun is needed and has incorrect word order; this is an incorrect use of adjectives/nouns and sentence structure (types 13 and 26). I changed 'beautiful' to the noun 'beauty' and rephrased to 'Kyoto, where I live now' for correct relative clause usage. Suggestion: use 'beauty' to refer to the quality and use 'where I live' after the place name to form a proper relative clause.

× They are very, uh, a lot of traditional buildings and so.

✓ There are a lot of traditional buildings.

The original mixes pronouns and structure incorrectly: 'They are very, uh, a lot of traditional buildings and so.' should use existential 'there are' to state existence; keeping 'they are' causes subject-verb and pronoun issues (types 27 and 12) and is ungrammatical (type 26). I simplified to 'There are a lot of traditional buildings.' Suggestion: use 'there is/are' to introduce existence and follow with correct noun phrases; avoid filler words and redundant endings like 'and so.'