Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Fix grammar (tense, articles) and avoid repetition. For example, say why photos matter to you and give a short specific example of a photo you keep.

Example: Yes. I enjoy taking photos because they capture a unique moment I can’t get back. For example, I took a picture of my grandmother cooking last month; every time I look at it I remember her smile, so the photo is very valuable to me.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear preference or say you like both and explain why using linking words. Correct unclear phrases and provide specific contrasts between urban and rural views. Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

Example: I like both urban and rural views because each offers different attractions. For example, cityscapes are exciting with tall buildings and busy streets, while the countryside is peaceful with open fields and fresh air, so I enjoy visiting both depending on my mood.

Suggestion: Give a clear reason and specific example. Fix vocabulary and grammar (use ‘they’re’ or ‘places I don’t know’ instead of unclear words). Explain what attracts you to foreign views—culture, architecture, or landscapes—and avoid vague expressions.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering unfamiliar places and cultures. For instance, when I visited Spain I loved the architecture and lively markets, which felt very different from what I see at home.

× Yes I do 'cause it's a treasure from this moment in now life and this won't appeared in my future life.

✓ Yes, I do, because it's a treasure from this moment in my life and this won't appear in my future life.

Pronoun and word choice: 'now life' is incorrect; use 'my life'. Verb form error: 'won't appeared' mixes future negative auxiliary with past participle; use base form 'appear' after 'won't'. Also replace informal 'cause' with 'because' and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'this won't appear' for future negative and 'in my life' for possession.

× I won't I won't give A to taking photos to live this moment.

✓ I won't stop taking photos to capture this moment.

Redundant repetition 'I won't I won't' and incorrect structure 'give A to taking photos to live this moment'. The intended meaning is preserved by 'I won't stop taking photos to capture this moment.' Use 'stop' + verb and 'capture' more idiomatic than 'live' here. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use clear verb phrases like 'stop taking photos' and 'capture this moment.'

× For me both, I like both cause cities have their own unique charms.

✓ For me, both; I like both, because cities and rural areas have their own unique charms.

Ambiguous reference: 'both' must specify the two options (urban and rural). Also 'cause' should be 'because'. Suggestion: explicitly mention 'cities and rural areas' for clarity and add punctuation.

× The error too and I live in the urban city too busy and the railroad to relax.

✓ I also live in a busy city, and I go to the countryside or near the railroad to relax.

This sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'The error too' is meaningless here. 'Urban city too busy' lacks articles and proper word order. I inferred intended meaning: city is busy and the student uses rural/railroad areas to relax. Suggestion: use 'I also live in a busy city' and 'go to the countryside or near the railroad to relax.'

× It's a combine.

✓ It's a combination of both.

'A combine' is incorrect noun choice; the correct phrase is 'a combination' or 'a mix.' Suggestion: use 'a combination of both' to show both preferences.

× I prefer in other countries 'cause he's very unknown ball and some dramatic things need me to meet met it and I love international things.

✓ I prefer other countries because they are unfamiliar and there are dramatic things I want to experience, and I love international cultures.

Pronoun and reference errors: 'he's' incorrectly refers to countries; use 'they are'. 'Unknown ball' is meaningless; likely 'unfamiliar' or 'unknown'. Verb forms: 'need me to meet met it' is incorrect; use 'I want to experience' or 'I want to encounter them.' Also 'prefer in other countries' should be 'prefer other countries.' Suggestion: use clear subjects and appropriate verbs: 'I prefer other countries because they are unfamiliar and I want to experience new things.'