Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Shorten and vary sentences, avoid repetition, and add one specific reason or short example. Use a clear topic sentence then one or two supporting details, linked logically.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially sunrises and sunsets, because I love capturing the warm colours in the sky. For example, last month I photographed a sunset over the river that showed vivid orange and pink reflections, which made the scene very memorable.

Suggestion: Start with a direct sentence and add one specific contrast with a linking word. Avoid repeating phrases like “urban areas” and keep it concise.

Example: I prefer rural views because they offer more greenery and open space. For instance, unlike cities where tall buildings block the horizon, countryside fields and trees allow uninterrupted views of the sky and landscape.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and overgeneralisation. Give one clear reason and a brief specific example or comparison, and remove absolute claims (e.g., “more beautiful than any other country”).

Example: I prefer views in my own country, especially around my city in Punjab, because the area has lush fields and vibrant sunsets. For example, the evening sky over the mustard fields often turns bright orange and purple, which I find more familiar and comforting than the views I saw abroad.

× Yes, I like to take pictures of different views such as sunsets or sunrise, because I love to capture those beautiful colours, those natural, beautiful colours of nature.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures of different views such as sunsets or sunrises, because I love to capture those natural, beautiful colours of nature.

The error is using the singular 'sunrise' together with the plural 'sunsets'. Use the same number form for parallel items: 'sunsets or sunrises'. Also 'those beautiful colours, those natural, beautiful colours of nature' is repetitive; simplifying to 'those natural, beautiful colours of nature' is more natural and grammatical.

× Well, I prefer views in rural areas because there is more greenery than the urban areas and in urban areas there are huge buildings which can hide the views.

✓ Well, I prefer views in rural areas because there is more greenery than in urban areas, and in urban areas there are huge buildings that can hide the views.

Two issues: comparison needs parallel structure — say 'more greenery than in urban areas' rather than 'than the urban areas'. Also 'which' can be used, but 'that' is preferred for essential clauses describing buildings; adding a comma before 'and' improves clarity. These changes fix parallelism and clause usage.

× Well, I prefer views in my own country, mainly in my city because I live in Punjab and it is a rich in nature and it is rich in nature and the and the sunsets here are more beautiful than any other country.

✓ Well, I prefer views in my own country, mainly in my city, because I live in Punjab and it is rich in natural beauty, and the sunsets here are more beautiful than in any other country.

Several errors corrected: remove the extra article 'a' in 'a rich in nature' and avoid repetition. Use the noun phrase 'rich in natural beauty' for correctness. For comparison, say 'more beautiful than in any other country' to compare sunsets with those in other countries. Removed duplicate words and fixed word order to be grammatical and clear.