Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail about what you photograph. Use linking words to connect ideas. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography is my hobby. For example, when I visit historical sites or the northern areas, I focus on capturing mountain panoramas and old architecture to preserve memories.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition and fillers, and include one clear specific reason with an example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and correct small grammar issues.

Example: I prefer rural areas because they offer natural scenery and tranquility. For example, places like Deosai, Hunza, and Attabad Lake have striking landscapes and clear views that let you fully appreciate nature.

Suggestion: Begin with a concise topic sentence, correct place names and small grammar (e.g., 'known for'), and give one specific example with a brief reason. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid redundancy.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because it has spectacular natural scenery. For instance, Gilgit-Baltistan and Attabad Lake feature rivers, waterfalls, and mountain streams, which make them especially beautiful to visit.

× 'So I take that pictures for my memories.'

✓ 'So I take those pictures for my memories.'

'Pictures' is plural, so the demonstrative must be plural too. Use those instead of that to agree in number; also using take is acceptable here for habitual action.

× 'So whenever I go to the go to the northern areas or some any ancient spaces where the history and the related things are going to be so beautiful and the ambience is going to be so good for me.'

✓ 'So whenever I go to the northern areas or to some ancient sites where the history and related features are beautiful and the ambience is pleasant for me.'

'Go to the go to' is a repetition error and 'some any' is redundant. 'Ancient spaces' is unnatural; use 'ancient sites.' 'Are going to be' is an incorrect future construction for habitual/characteristic description; use simple present or present adjective phrases. Reorder and simplify for clarity.

× 'Yes, I really like taking pictures of different views because it's my hobby as well.'

✓ 'Yes, I really like taking pictures of different views because it is my hobby too.'

'As well' is natural but 'too' is more common in this position; both are acceptable. This suggestion focuses on idiomatic register. No major grammatical error but small stylistic improvement.

× 'that view in that view you can really enjoy and you will feel the nature and the beauty.'

✓ 'In that view you can really enjoy and feel the beauty of nature.'

'You will feel the nature' is awkward and repetitive. Combine verbs and use 'feel the beauty of nature' for correct noun phrase order and natural expression; use present modal 'can' for potential experience instead of mixing tenses.

× 'I prefer views in rural, rural areas because in the rural areas we have trees, We have other, other different sceneries like landscapes and the, uh, for example, if we just go to the northern area, uh, Deosai, Hunza and Attabad lake, where we see different views and that view in that view you can really enjoy and you will feel the nature and the beauty.'

✓ 'I prefer views in rural areas because there are trees and other different sceneries like landscapes. For example, if we go to northern areas such as Deosai, Hunza and Attabad Lake, we see many different views where we can enjoy and feel the beauty of nature.'

'Rural, rural areas' repeats unnecessarily. Capitalization of 'We' is wrong. 'Attabad lake' should be 'Attabad Lake' and 'northern area' should be plural when listing several places. Use 'there are' to introduce plural nouns. Simplify and correct pluralization and proper nouns.

× 'Yes, I definitely prefer my country because my country is known As for its nature and its sceneries.'

✓ 'Yes, I definitely prefer my country because it is known for its natural scenery.'

'Known As for' is incorrect capitalization and phrasing. 'Sceneries' is uncountable in this context; use 'scenery' or 'natural scenery.' Replace repeated 'my country' with 'it' to avoid redundancy.

× 'If you go to the northern area, you will see different type of places like Honda Lake and Gilgit Baltistan where you can see different type of streams, rivers are flowing through the hills and the waterfalls as well as you will really enjoy the nature over there.'

✓ 'If you go to the northern areas, you will see different types of places such as Attabad Lake and Gilgit-Baltistan, where streams and rivers flow through the hills and there are waterfalls; you will really enjoy the nature there.'

'Northern area' should be plural when referring to a region with multiple places. Use 'types' plural and correct place name 'Attabad Lake' (not Honda). Use present simple 'flow' for general facts rather than 'are flowing.' Insert 'there are' before waterfalls for correct structure and use 'there' at end instead of 'over there' for conciseness.