Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm, uh), and use a supporting detail or short example. Also correct subject-verb agreement ("pictures make me" → "taking pictures makes me").

Example: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. It makes me feel refreshed and inspired, especially when I capture colourful sunsets or lively city streets.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, reduce hesitation, and provide one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, "because" and "for instance"). Avoid vague phrases like "you know" and repetition. Use precise vocabulary (transport → public transport, skyline → architecture).

Example: I prefer urban views because of the striking skylines and lively streets. For example, I enjoy photographing modern architecture and busy markets that show the city’s energy.

Suggestion: Make a clear, grammatically correct statement and give precise comparisons. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Use linking words (however, although, because) and specific examples (cleaner streets, advanced public transport). Correct phrasing: "I can see more innovation" and avoid repeating words like "more, more."

Example: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and meaningful to me. However, I also appreciate scenery abroad because cities there often have cleaner streets and more modern infrastructure, such as efficient public transport and contemporary architecture.

× even taking pictures of different views make me feel, uh, energetic, new and awesome.

✓ even taking pictures of different views makes me feel energetic, new and awesome.

Subject 'taking pictures of different views' is a gerund phrase functioning as a singular subject; it requires the singular verb 'makes'. Use 'makes' instead of 'make' to match subject-verb agreement.

× in other countries they are, they are more clean, they are more pure and, uh, you know, I can able to see more innovations.

✓ in other countries they are cleaner, they are purer and I can see more innovations.

Comparative adjectives require the comparative form (cleaner, purer) rather than 'more clean/more pure'. Also, 'can able to' is incorrect: either 'can' or 'be able to' should be used. Use 'I can see' to be concise and grammatically correct.

× They are more, more infrastructure there and in my own country, as you know, that I.

✓ There is more infrastructure there than in my own country, as you know.

The original had incorrect word order and preposition use. Use 'There is more infrastructure there than in my own country' to compare quantities correctly and place 'there' appropriately. Also remove the incomplete clause 'that I' to make a complete sentence.

× in other countries they are, they are more clean, they are more pure and, uh, you know, I can able to see more innovations.

✓ in other countries people are cleaner, the environment is purer, and I can see more innovations.

The pronoun 'they' was ambiguous when referring to 'other countries'. Specify the intended subject (people, environment) to improve clarity and correctness. Also apply correct comparative forms and remove 'able' after 'can'.

× Umm, I would prefer views in urban areas rather than rural areas, uh, because of the city skylines and, you know, transports and people.

✓ I would prefer views in urban areas rather than rural areas because of the city skylines, public transport, and people.

The phrase 'because of the city skylines and, you know, transports and people' is informal and has an incorrect noun 'transports'. Use 'public transport' and list items in parallel. Remove filler phrases like 'you know' for clarity and formality appropriate to an exam.