Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và mạch văn: sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, chia câu phức tạp thành câu ngắn hơn, và chọn từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: "record the moment", "natural scenery", "love at first sight", "look back"). Sử dụng liên từ hợp lý để nối ý và tránh lặp từ. Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn để làm rõ vì sao bạn chụp ảnh (ví dụ: lưu lại cảm xúc hoặc thay đổi theo thời gian).

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I want to record special moments. For example, I often photograph natural scenery like sunsets and cityscapes so that years later I can look back and remember how I felt. Taking photos helps me capture emotions and changes over time.

Suggestion: Sửa ngữ pháp, dùng cấu trúc so sánh đúng và diễn đạt rõ ràng: nói trực tiếp "I prefer rural areas to urban areas". Tránh cụm từ mơ hồ như "in my heart" và sửa lỗi từ như "try pace" → "a slower pace". Thêm một lý do cụ thể ngắn kèm liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

Example: I prefer rural areas to urban areas because the air is fresher and people seem friendlier. Also, I enjoy the slower pace of life in the countryside, which helps me relax and feel less stressed.

Suggestion: Làm rõ câu trả lời cho câu hỏi so sánh (nước mình hay nước khác) và sửa ngữ pháp/ từ vựng: dùng "I'd like to visit Korea" thay vì "go to Korean"; "scenery" thay "sceneries"; "cable car" thay "cable band"; giải thích vì sao cụ thể (ví dụ: phong cảnh, văn hóa). Tránh thông tin không liên quan hoặc thiếu rõ ràng như "I have idol in it" — nếu đề cập, giải thích ngắn vì điều đó ảnh hưởng đến mong muốn thăm quan như thế nào.

Example: I would prefer to see views in other countries, such as Korea, because of its beautiful scenery. For instance, I want to see snowy landscapes and cherry blossoms, and I am excited to try scenic cable-car rides. Also, visiting Korea would let me experience its culture and places related to my favourite idol.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I want to record the moment, including a natural synchronous, A cityscape or something else that make me love at first sight that after many years I can look at look back at all photos which recall me about the past.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I want to record the moment, such as a natural scene, a cityscape, or something that makes me love it at first sight so that after many years I can look back at the photos and remember the past.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: run-on clauses, incorrect word choices, and verb agreement. 'including a natural synchronous' is incorrect; use 'such as a natural scene'. 'that make me love at first sight' should be 'that makes me love it at first sight' to agree with singular 'something' and include the pronoun 'it'. 'look at look back at all photos which recall me about the past' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'look back at the photos and remember the past'. Suggestion: break complex ideas into shorter clauses, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use appropriate relative pronouns and prepositions.

× In my heart, I prefer the rural areas than the state than urban areas because I like the fresh air, friendly people and I can have a try pace of life.

✓ In my heart, I prefer rural areas to urban areas because I like the fresh air, friendly people, and a slower pace of life.

Use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A than B'. 'the rural areas' and 'urban areas' do not need 'the' here. 'I can have a try pace of life' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'a slower pace of life'. Suggestion: use the correct preposition 'to' after 'prefer', remove unnecessary articles, and use idiomatic expressions like 'a slower pace of life'.

× Yes, if I had a chance, I want to go to Korean because of its sceneries.

✓ Yes, if I had a chance, I would want to go to Korea because of its scenery.

The conditional mixes past unreal condition with present simple result. For a hypothetical present/future situation, use conditional 'would' (or 'would like'). Also 'Korean' is an adjective; the country name is 'Korea'. 'Sceneries' is uncountable in this sense; use 'scenery'. Suggestion: use matching conditional structure (If I had a chance, I would...), use correct country noun, and use 'scenery' as an uncountable noun.

× I love snow, cherry blossom, especially the cable band.

✓ I love snow and cherry blossoms, especially the cable car.

'Cherry blossom' should be pluralized as 'cherry blossoms' when speaking generally. 'Cable band' is incorrect; likely meant 'cable car'. Use 'and' to connect items. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate.

× In fact, I love views in Korean because I have idol in it.

✓ In fact, I love the views in Korea because I have an idol there.

'In Korean' is incorrect when referring to the country; use 'in Korea' or 'of Korea'. 'I have idol in it' misses the article and uses 'it' awkwardly; say 'I have an idol there'. Suggestion: use correct country preposition and include articles before singular countable nouns; use 'there' to refer to a place.