Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like taking pictures, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'but', 'however', 'so') and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Mention a concrete example of a scene you photographed to make your answer more specific.

Example: No, I don't usually take many pictures because I often forget my phone when I'm out. However, I do sometimes take photos to remember special moments, for example, a sunset over the lake last summer, which reminded me of that peaceful evening.

Suggestion: Give a clear preference or explain a balanced view in one concise topic sentence, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'although'. Avoid repeating ideas and tighten phrasing.

Example: I can't choose between urban and rural views because I appreciate both: I love the bright city lights and vibrant architecture in towns, but I also enjoy the tranquility and green spaces of the countryside, especially when I go for a long walk in a quiet park.

Suggestion: Be concise and complete your sentence. Start with a clear statement (e.g., 'I prefer views in other countries') then give one or two specific reasons and a brief example. Avoid trailing endings and clarify what 'peaceful version' refers to.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because they often appear more peaceful and less crowded than where I live. For example, many photos of rural towns abroad show quiet streets and open landscapes, which is a contrast to the busy city scenes in my country.

× To be honest, I don't like taking pictures as much as I want to be because when I'm out, I usually forget that I have a phone.

✓ To be honest, I don't like taking pictures as much as I would like to, because when I'm out I usually forget that I have my phone.

The phrase 'as much as I want to be' is incorrect. Use 'as much as I would like to' to express desired degree. Also 'a phone' should be 'my phone' to indicate possession. Suggestion: replace the awkward phrase with 'as much as I would like to' and use possessive pronoun for clarity.

× But sometimes I do take pictures, uh, because it has a way of remembering things or the beautiful sceneries that I went or I go.

✓ But sometimes I do take pictures because it helps me remember things or the beautiful scenery I have seen or see.

Several issues: 'it has a way of remembering' is awkward; use 'it helps me remember'. 'Sceneries' is incorrect — 'scenery' is an uncountable noun. 'that I went or I go' is ungrammatical; use 'that I have seen or see' to match present/perfect meaning. Suggestion: use 'helps me remember', 'scenery', and simplify the tense to 'have seen' or 'see' depending on intended meaning.

× To be honest, I can't choose because I'm either a city girl or a countryside girl because I love nature and I can see it often in urban or in rural areas, but I do love city lights in urban area.

✓ To be honest, I can't choose because I'm both a city girl and a countryside girl: I love nature and I can see it often in both urban and rural areas, but I do love city lights in urban areas.

'Either...or' was misused; speaker means 'both'. Use 'both...and' for inclusion. 'in urban or in rural areas' is redundant — use 'in both urban and rural areas'. 'urban area' should be plural 'urban areas' to match context. Suggestion: replace 'either' with 'both' and streamline prepositions.

× I've never been to another country or countries, but from what I see on social media, I prefer the views of the other countries rather than in my country because my country is so busy and I like the peaceful version of.

✓ I've never been to another country, but from what I see on social media, I prefer the views of other countries to those in my country because my country is so busy and I prefer the peaceful ones.

Redundant 'or countries' removed. Compare preferences with 'prefer A to B' not 'rather than in'. 'the views of the other countries' -> 'views of other countries'. 'the peaceful version of' is incomplete; use 'the peaceful ones' or 'the peaceful views'. Suggestion: use correct comparative structure 'prefer A to B', remove redundancy, and complete the final noun phrase.