Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện độ trôi chảy và ngữ pháp: tránh tiếng ừ/mmm, sửa cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng hơn, dùng thì phù hợp và chia động từ đúng. Thêm một câu chủ đề và một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn (ví dụ nơi chụp, mục đích chụp) và dùng liên từ để nối ý.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. When I travel with my family, I often use my camera to photograph landscapes and landmarks for my mother, so she has memories of our trips.

Suggestion: Cải thiện từ vựng chính xác, ngữ pháp và tính mạch lạc: sử dụng danh từ số nhiều khi cần (views), sửa lỗi từ vựng không rõ ("code field" không phù hợp), diễn đạt rõ lý do với liên từ như "because" và bổ sung ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và mô tả mâu thuẫn (urban vs peaceful).

Example: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and more peaceful; for example, I enjoy seeing green fields, rivers and lakes where the atmosphere feels calm.

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, trật tự từ và cụm danh từ: sửa thì (it makes), dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng để giải thích lý do, thêm chi tiết cụ thể về điều muốn khám phá (ví dụ ẩm thực, kiến trúc). Dùng liên từ để nối ý và tránh lỗi sai động từ (go sightseeing).

Example: I prefer views in other countries because they make me happy and allow me to explore different traditions and cultures; for example, I enjoyed sightseeing in London with my family and visiting historic buildings.

× I really like taking pictures umm of a lot of views.

✓ I really like taking pictures of many different views.

The original sentence is informal and a bit awkward. 'A lot of views' is better expressed as 'many different views'. Remove filler 'umm' for clarity. Use 'many' with countable noun 'views' and include 'different' to match meaning.

× I when I go to when I traveling with my family I use my camera to take a lot of photo for my mother.

✓ When I travel with my family, I use my camera to take many photos for my mother.

The original sentence has redundant words and wrong verb forms. Use 'When I travel' (present simple for habitual action). 'Traveling' should be 'travel' after 'when I'. 'A lot of photo' is incorrect; use plural 'many photos'. Also add commas for clarity.

× I prefer view in urban area because in there have a lot of view like code field and river or lake in there very peaceful and and white.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because there are many things to see, such as crowded streets, rivers or lakes; it feels peaceful and beautiful there.

Multiple plural and countability errors: 'view' should be 'views', 'urban area' -> 'urban areas'. Use 'there are' instead of 'in there have'. 'A lot of view' -> 'many things to see' or 'many views'. 'code field' unclear—likely 'crowded streets' or 'cityscapes'. 'and and white' is incorrect; 'white' likely meant 'quiet' or 'beautiful' so replaced with 'beautiful'. Also adjust word order for natural English.

× I prefer in another country because it make me feel happy and explore a lot of traditional and for example I like go to London to sightseeing with my family.

✓ I prefer visiting other countries because they make me feel happy and allow me to explore many traditions; for example, I like going to London to go sightseeing with my family.

Errors in verb forms and sentence structure: 'I prefer in another country' should be 'I prefer visiting other countries'. 'It make' -> 'they make' to match plural 'countries'. 'Explore a lot of traditional' is incorrect; use 'explore many traditions'. 'I like go to London to sightseeing' -> 'I like going to London to go sightseeing' or 'I like going sightseeing in London'. Adjusted to natural phrasing and correct verb forms.