Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but has redundancy and some unnatural phrasing. Begin with a direct topic sentence, avoid repeating ideas (e.g. “go out” and “go outside”), correct countable nouns (family, not families) and keep to a maximum of about 3–4 concise sentences. Add a brief specific detail or example using a linking word (e.g. “for example” or “because”) to make it more informative.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography is one of my hobbies. For example, when I visit a park I often photograph the skyline and tree-lined paths. I usually take photos with my family or occasionally with friends, which makes the outing more fun.

Suggestion: The answer is unfocused and contains grammatical errors and an unclear structure. Start with a clear preference (urban or rural) as the topic sentence. If you compare both, use linking words (e.g. “however”, “while”, “on the other hand”) and give specific reasons or examples. Avoid trailing phrases like “including” without finishing the thought.

Example: I prefer urban views because cities have interesting architecture and lively streets. However, rural areas can be peaceful and offer beautiful natural scenes, such as open fields and rivers. For photography, I usually choose the city for its variety of buildings and street life.

Suggestion: This is a direct and relevant answer but could be improved with more specific details and a linking word to expand. Replace vague phrases like “creative views” with concrete examples (e.g. monuments, traditional markets) and keep to two or three sentences maximum.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because it has many historical sites and unique cultural scenes. For example, I often photograph old monuments and vibrant local markets, which tell stories that foreign locations might not offer.

× Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it is a part of my hobby.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it is part of my hobby.

The phrase 'it is a part of my hobby' is grammatically acceptable but awkward; 'part of my hobby' is more natural and concise. Remove the indefinite article 'a' before 'part' to improve fluency and correctness. Suggestion: say 'it is part of my hobby' or better 'it's one of my hobbies' depending on intended meaning.

× Whenever I go out, I go outside.

✓ Whenever I go out, I take photos outside.

The original repeats the same meaning ('go out' and 'go outside') making the sentence redundant. Replace the second clause with a phrase that adds information relevant to the topic, such as 'I take photos outside.' This avoids repetition and clarifies the activity. Suggestion: combine actions to be concise: 'Whenever I go out, I take photos outside.'

× I take photographs with my families and sometimes with my friends.

✓ I take photographs with my family and sometimes with my friends.

'Families' is plural and usually refers to multiple family units; when talking about one's own relatives, use the singular collective noun 'family.' Use 'my family' to refer to family members as a group. Keep 'friends' plural if referring to more than one friend. Suggestion: use 'my family' for your relatives.

× Yes, I prefer to take views urban areas offering robust infrastructure and there are so many career opportunities and diverse amenities, while rural areas provide a quieter, more natural and less crowded environment, including.

✓ I prefer urban areas because they offer robust infrastructure, many career opportunities, and diverse amenities, while rural areas provide a quieter, more natural, and less crowded environment.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: missing preposition/article before 'urban areas', incorrect verb forms ('offering' should be 'offer' agreeing with 'urban areas'), an unnecessary 'there are', and a trailing word 'including' with no object. Recast the sentence into two balanced clauses: 'urban areas offer...' and 'rural areas provide...'. This fixes subject-verb agreement and removes the incomplete 'including.' Suggestion: separate contrasts clearly and ensure verbs agree with their subjects.

× Yes, I prefer views in my own country because there are so many historical places as well as many other creative views that we can capture in our photos.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because there are many historical sites and other interesting scenes we can capture in photos.

'So many' is informal but acceptable; streamline to 'many' for a more neutral register. 'Historical places' is better expressed as 'historical sites.' 'Creative views' is awkward; 'interesting scenes' or 'scenic spots' is clearer. Remove 'our' before 'photos' or keep it consistently; 'in photos' is concise. The sentence structure is long but can be improved for clarity. Suggestion: use 'historical sites' and 'scenic spots' or 'interesting scenes' for clearer meaning.