Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition and fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'capture whole views' → 'capture the whole view') and remove repeated phrases.

Example: Yes, I do. When we go out I often stand at the back so I can capture the whole view, and I especially enjoy photographing landscapes because a single good shot can keep a great memory. For example, I once took a sunset shot that reminded me of a calm evening at the coast.

Suggestion: Provide a clearer topic sentence and add one specific reason with an example. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like 'busy city thing.' Reduce redundancy to stay within 3–4 sentences.

Example: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and relaxing. For instance, the quiet countryside allows me to unwind and forget about the stress of city life, so I often go for walks there to clear my mind.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first, then explain briefly with a specific reason. Fix small language issues ('clearview' → 'clear view') and avoid repeating the idea 'not fair to judge.' One or two concise sentences are enough.

Example: At the moment I prefer views in my own country because I haven't traveled abroad yet and know those landscapes better. Until I visit other countries, I can't really compare them fairly.

× I usually, umm, set myself at the back so I can capture the whole views of different views.

✓ I usually, umm, set myself at the back so I can capture the whole view.

The phrase 'the whole views of different views' is ungrammatical and redundant. 'View' as a general concept is a singular uncountable/collective noun here, so use 'the whole view' or 'the whole scene'. Remove the repeated 'views' to avoid redundancy and ensure correct noun form.

× And it's, it's just so refreshing when I capture a good moment for keeps.

✓ And it's just so refreshing when I capture a good moment to keep.

The expression 'for keeps' is informal and idiomatic but awkward here. 'To keep' or 'to hold on to' fits better in standard usage. Also remove the duplicated filler 'it's, it's' for fluency. Use 'to keep' to indicate preserving the moment.

× I prefer the views in rural areas just because I think that it's very refreshing there, like it's very relaxing.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I find them very refreshing and relaxing.

Use 'views' without 'the' for general preference. 'I think that it's very refreshing there, like it's very relaxing' is redundant and uses filler 'like'. Combine ideas: 'I find them very refreshing and relaxing.' Also ensure pronoun 'them' agrees with plural 'views'.

× You can keep your mind off that busy city thing, which is a good thing for me at least, because right now I tend to be very tense, so that helps.

✓ You can take your mind off the busy city, which helps me because I have been feeling very tense lately.

'That busy city thing' is informal and vague; use 'the busy city' or 'city life'. 'Keep your mind off' is acceptable but 'take your mind off' is more natural. Adjust tense and phrasing for clarity: 'helps me because I have been feeling very tense lately' matches the present state.

× Right now I would say the views in my own country, just because I'm still not able to go abroad, so I don't really have a clearview of that.

✓ Right now I would say the views in my own country, just because I'm still not able to go abroad, so I don't really have a clear view of other countries.

'clearview' should be two words: 'clear view'. Also clarify reference: 'of that' is vague—use 'of other countries'. This fixes word spacing and reference clarity.

× So I don't think it's fair for me to judge the countries.

✓ So I don't think it's fair for me to judge other countries.

'Judge the countries' is awkward; specify 'other countries' to contrast with 'my own country'. This corrects the sentence structure and makes the meaning clear.