Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "take pictures of" repeated) and long, run-on sentences. Use varied vocabulary such as "capture" or "photograph," and correct small grammar issues (e.g., tense and article use).

Example: Yes. I enjoy photographing scenes that catch my eye. For example, when I visit coastal areas or mountains I often capture wide landscapes and close-up details so I can relive those memories later.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons with correct vocabulary. Avoid vague or invented words (e.g., "natureful") and unclear phrases ("whistle rods business"). Use linking words like "because" and "for example." Correct grammar and word choice will make your answer more natural.

Example: I prefer rural views because I enjoy natural landscapes. For example, the countryside is quieter and has cleaner air, whereas cities often have traffic noise and pollution, which I find unpleasant.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then support with specific examples and a brief explanation. Avoid awkward phrasing like "prefer these much" and overemphasising patriotism without explaining why the landscapes appeal. Use linking words such as "for instance" or "because" and correct word order and articles.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because I find the local landscapes special and familiar. For instance, the northern valleys like Kagan and Hamza offer dramatic mountains and lush valleys, which remind me of home and cultural traditions.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of the views which I think that are worth seeing and whenever I go to some northern areas and hilly areas or beaches, I take pictures of that so I can recall that as a memory whenever I see them in future.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of views that I think are worth seeing, and whenever I go to northern or hilly areas or beaches, I take pictures so I can recall those memories when I see them in the future.

Errors: unnecessary use of 'that' after 'think', awkward phrasing 'take pictures of that', and 'as a memory' is unnatural. Also repeated 'whenever' and missing articles. Suggestion: Use 'that' (without 'which') to introduce restrictive clause, pluralize 'those memories', and use 'in the future' for time reference. Keep verbs in present simple for habitual action.

× Basically I am a nature viewing person so I like the rural areas most and I don't like urban areas as because of traffic hassle and whistle rods business and the chimneys smog.

✓ Basically I am a nature-loving person, so I prefer rural areas and I don't like urban areas because of traffic, noisy roads, and chimney smoke.

Errors: 'nature viewing person' is unnatural; use 'nature-loving'. 'as because of' is incorrect; use 'because of'. 'whistle rods business' is unclear—likely 'noisy roads' or 'busy roads'. 'chimneys smog' should be 'chimney smoke' or 'smog from chimneys'. Also 'prefer' fits better than 'like... most.' Adjust word order and word choice for clarity.

× And I like rural area views they are pure and soft and natureful.

✓ I like rural views; they are pure, gentle, and full of nature.

Errors: 'rural area views' is awkward; use 'rural views'. 'Natureful' is not standard English; use 'full of nature' or 'natural'. 'Soft' is acceptable but 'gentle' fits better. Add punctuation to separate clauses.

× Now views in my own country are very worth seeing as the northern areas, the Kagan Valley in Iran Valley, Hamza Valley, Shagan Kashmir, all are captivating views and I prefer these much because I am a patriotic person.

✓ The views in my own country are well worth seeing; for example, the northern areas such as Kagan Valley, Hamza Valley, and Shagan in Kashmir are captivating, and I prefer them because I am patriotic.

Errors: missing definite article 'The views'. Phrase 'very worth seeing' is better as 'well worth seeing'. 'the Kagan Valley in Iran Valley' is unclear—remove redundancy. Use commas and conjunctions to improve sentence structure. 'I prefer these much' is nonnative; use 'I prefer them'.