Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question directly (e.g. "Yes, I do" or "Sometimes, yes"). Avoid awkward phrases like "human seasons" and "consume the whole view". Use one or two specific supporting details and linking words (for example, "for instance" or "so"). Keep your response under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views. For instance, when I’m with my family I often take photos to remember those moments, so I choose angles that show everyone and the background. However, sometimes I prefer to just enjoy the scene without my phone.

Suggestion: Answer directly and expand with a clear reason and a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like "At this age" unless you clarify. Use one or two specific examples of what you enjoy seeing in cities to make your answer more concrete.

Example: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy watching daily city life. For example, I like seeing commuters walking to work and small cafés where people meet; these scenes feel lively and interesting to me.

Suggestion: This answer is unclear and disorganized. Start by directly answering the question (e.g. "I prefer views in other countries" or "I prefer views in my own country"). Then give one clear reason and a specific example. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like "however" or "because" to connect ideas and keep to a maximum of five sentences.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because I’ve learned to appreciate familiar places from new perspectives. For example, after working at the tallest building in the Southern Hemisphere I began to notice parts of the city I used to dislike; seeing them from above helped me appreciate their layout and activity.

× Depending on the human seasons that I am on, there are times where I would just consume the whole view on my own and enjoy them.

✓ Depending on the phase of life I am in, there are times when I just take in the whole view by myself and enjoy it.

Pronoun and noun-use issues: 'human seasons' is unnatural; 'phase of life' is clearer. 'There are times where' should be 'there are times when'. 'Consume the whole view' is awkward; 'take in the whole view' is idiomatic. 'On my own' and 'by myself' are both possible, choose one. 'Enjoy them' incorrectly refers to 'view' (singular), so use 'enjoy it'. Suggestion: simplify expressions and ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× But there are also time when I just want to cherish the moments forever.

✓ But there are also times when I just want to cherish the moments forever.

Pluralization error: 'time' should be plural 'times' to match 'there are'. Also use 'when' not 'where'. Suggestion: use 'there are times when' for repeated occasions.

× Like for example when I was with my family, with my loved ones, I like to take a picture so that I can keep them in frame.

✓ For example, when I am with my family or loved ones, I like to take a picture so that I can keep those memories in a frame.

Awkward structure and pronominal reference: 'Like for example' is redundant; use 'For example'. Tense consistency: use present simple 'I am' to match general preference. 'Keep them in frame' is unclear: 'those memories' clarifies the object and 'in a frame' is idiomatic. Ensure pronoun 'them' refers clearly to plural antecedent.

× At this age, I've been enjoying urban areas even more.

✓ At this age, I enjoy urban areas even more.

Tense issue: present perfect continuous 'I've been enjoying' implies an ongoing change but is less natural when stating a current preference. Simple present 'I enjoy' expresses a current general preference more appropriately. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and preferences.

× I enjoy seeing people going to work, doing their things that they love, a mundane thing.

✓ I enjoy seeing people going to work, doing the things they love; it's a simple, everyday scene.

Word choice and sentence cohesion: 'doing their things that they love' is awkward; 'doing the things they love' is concise. 'A mundane thing' is vague; 'it's a simple, everyday scene' clarifies meaning. Improve flow with punctuation or conjunctions.

× I've been loving to observe people in the urban areas.

✓ I love observing people in urban areas.

Incorrect verb + -ing/infinitive use: 'love' is a stative verb and is normally used as 'I love observing' rather than 'I've been loving to observe'. Also drop the article 'the' before 'urban areas' for general reference. Suggestion: use simple present with gerund after verbs of preference.

× I work at the tallest building building in the Southern Hemisphere.

✓ I work in the tallest building in the Southern Hemisphere.

Repeated word 'building building' is likely a typo. Preposition: use 'in' rather than 'at' when referring to working inside a building. Suggestion: remove duplicate word and use 'in' for location inside a building.

× Initially, I hate the city that I lived in.

✓ Initially, I hated the city that I lived in.

Tense mismatch: 'Initially' refers to a past feeling, so use past tense 'hated' not present 'hate'. Maintain past tense for past states. Suggestion: align verb tense with temporal adverbs.

× When I get to stay from different perspective, there's a different angle that I get to love that I rarely see.

✓ When I get to see the city from a different perspective, I notice a different side that I learn to appreciate and had rarely seen before.

Multiple structural and tense issues: 'get to stay from different perspective' is ungrammatical; 'see the city from a different perspective' is clearer. Mix of present and past tenses: 'I get to love that I rarely see' is awkward; change to 'I learn to appreciate what I had rarely seen before' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify clauses, keep consistent tense, and clarify the object of 'see' and 'appreciate'.

× And that made me realize that in this world, things that you frequent.

✓ That made me realize that in this world, the things you are familiar with can be seen differently.

Incomplete sentence: 'things that you frequent' is a fragment and unclear. 'Frequent' as a verb needs an object or convert to 'you frequent' meaning 'you visit often'—but the intended meaning is likely 'things you are familiar with' or 'things you often see'. Suggestion: complete the sentence by explaining how familiarity changes perception.