Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers ("I mean", "uh"), remove repetition, and add one specific detail about what you photograph. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

Example: I don’t consider myself a photographer, but I do take pictures occasionally, especially when I go hiking in British Columbia. For example, I usually photograph mountain vistas and alpine lakes and share the best shots on my Instagram story.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid negative vagueness, correct grammar, and add a clear supporting reason with a linking word. Finish the sentence and be specific about what you like in rural views.

Example: I prefer rural views because I grew up in Indian villages and enjoy natural scenes. For instance, I love seeing fields, small rivers and traditional houses, which feel peaceful compared with noisy city streets.

Suggestion: Remove hesitation and informal words, give a clear topic sentence, and support it with a specific example using a linking phrase. Correct place names and use one or two concise supporting details.

Example: I prefer the views here in British Columbia because I hike frequently and the local scenery is exceptional. For example, the hike to Strathcona (or [correct local name]) Peak offers panoramic coastal and mountain views that I find more impressive than many places I’ve seen elsewhere.

× I mean, I'm not that much into photography, but I take it on occasion.

✓ I mean, I'm not that much into photography, but I take photos on occasion.

Incorrect verb+noun usage: 'take it on occasion' is awkward because 'take' needs an object like 'photos' when referring to photography; use the noun 'photos' instead of 'it'. Also 'on occasion' is correct phrase order. Suggestion: use 'take photos on occasion' or 'take pictures occasionally.'

× Uh, I take it occasionally.

✓ Uh, I take pictures occasionally.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly replaces 'pictures.' Use the noun 'pictures' because 'take' in photography takes plural objects. This fixes clarity and agreement.

× Like whenever I go for hiking, like here in British Columbia, I take pictures and put it on my story on Instagram and videos of the app.

✓ Whenever I go hiking here in British Columbia, I take pictures and put them on my Instagram story and in videos on the app.

Preposition and phrase issues: say 'go hiking' rather than 'go for hiking.' Also 'here in British Columbia' is better placed directly. 'Put it' is wrong because 'pictures' is plural, so use 'them.' 'On my story on Instagram' is awkward; use 'on my Instagram story' and 'in videos on the app.'

× It's rural areas.

✓ I prefer rural areas.

Sentence fragment and pronoun misuse: 'It's rural areas' is ungrammatical because 'it' does not agree with 'rural areas.' Better to state preference explicitly: 'I prefer rural areas.' This fixes subject-verb and meaning.

× I don't like the views of urban areas.

✓ I don't like the views in urban areas.

Preposition/article choice: 'views of urban areas' is understandable but 'views in urban areas' is more natural. No definite article is needed before 'urban areas.'

× From my childhood, I lived in the rural areas in the villages of India and I'm used to see the village life.

✓ Since my childhood, I lived in rural villages in India and I'm used to seeing village life.

Several issues: 'From my childhood' is better as 'Since my childhood.' 'lived in the rural areas in the villages of India' is wordy; 'lived in rural villages in India' is concise. 'I'm used to see' is incorrect: after 'used to' (meaning accustomed) use gerund 'seeing.'

× I don't like to see the industries and the buildings, all of the places.

✓ I don't like seeing factories, buildings, and similar places.

Awkward wording: 'I don't like to see' is acceptable but 'I don't like seeing' matches 'used to seeing.' 'Industries' is vague; 'factories' is clearer. 'All of the places' is unclear; replace with 'similar places.'

× That's why I quite like the.

✓ That's why I quite like them.

Sentence fragment: 'the' at end is incomplete. It likely refers to 'rural areas' or 'those views,' so use 'them' to refer back, or restate 'rural views.' Ensure clarity by saying 'That's why I quite like them' or 'That's why I quite like rural views.'

× To be honest, iya, I prefer the views in here in Canada and BC.

✓ To be honest, I prefer the views here in Canada and BC.

Typo and preposition error: 'iya' is likely 'ya' or filler; remove it. Use 'here in Canada and BC' without 'in' after 'views.' 'the views in here' is incorrect; say 'views here.'

× As I mentioned earlier, I'm into hiking.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I'm into hiking.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatical. Included to show it's acceptable.

× I do a lot of hiking and whenever I go for hiking, I take pictures.

✓ I do a lot of hiking and whenever I go hiking, I take pictures.

Use 'go hiking' not 'go for hiking.' This is standard collocation: 'go hiking' or 'go for a hike.'

× I mean, Strongest Chief is one of the biggest example of the beautiful hikes in this area.

✓ I mean, Strongest Chief is one of the biggest examples of beautiful hikes in this area.

Number agreement and article: 'one of the biggest example' should be 'one of the biggest examples.' Remove 'the' before 'beautiful hikes' for natural phrasing. 'Strongest Chief' capitalization is fine if it's a proper name.

× So yeah, I'd like the scenes here a lot.

✓ So yeah, I like the scenery here a lot.

'I'd like the scenes here a lot' is awkward; 'scenery' is the correct uncountable noun for landscapes and views. Use simple present 'I like' to express general preference. 'The scenes' is not natural in this context.