Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct minor grammar/word choice errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct plural/singular and name pronunciation, and avoid filler words (uh, like that).

Example: I usually choose music based on my mood. For example, when I feel cheerful I listen to upbeat K-pop groups such as Blackpink to boost my energy, but when I’m sad I prefer slow ballads because they help me reflect and calm down.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Remove fillers and correct article use ("happy music" not "a happy music"). Add a brief personal example to make it more vivid.

Example: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited. For instance, upbeat songs with a strong beat make me want to clap or sing along, and because of that my energy increases and my mood improves throughout the day.

× if I feel down I often listen to sad song because I can reflect myself on it.

✓ if I feel down I often listen to sad songs because I can reflect on them.

The noun 'song' should be plural 'songs' because the speaker refers to sad music in general, not a single song. Also replace 'reflect myself on it' with 'reflect on them' — 'reflect on' is the correct verb-preposition pattern and 'them' matches the plural noun. Suggestion: use plural for general categories and the correct verb-preposition combination: 'reflect on'.

× when you hear a happy music, uh, you will feel more energetic

✓ when you hear happy music, uh, you will feel more energetic

'Music' is an uncountable noun and does not take the indefinite article 'a'. Remove 'a' to say 'hear happy music'. Suggestion: do not use 'a' with uncountable nouns like 'music', 'information', 'advice'.

× you can sing a song, uh, along with the music

✓ you can sing along with the music

The phrase 'sing along with' is the correct idiomatic structure; adding 'a song' is redundant. 'Sing along with the music' uses the verb plus adverbial particle correctly. Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions without unnecessary noun phrases.

× and yeah, make your day feel more, uh, meaningful.

✓ and yeah, it can make your day feel more, uh, meaningful.

The original fragment lacks a clear subject for 'make'. Adding 'it can' provides a subject and modal nuance consistent with the rest of the sentence ('you will feel', 'you can sing'). Suggestion: ensure each clause has an explicit subject when needed to avoid sentence fragments.

× if I feel cheerful I often listen to upbeat music like Blackpink or Yeah Cortis like that

✓ if I feel cheerful, I often listen to upbeat music like Blackpink or Yae Cortis, things like that

Punctuation (comma) is needed after the conditional clause. 'Yeah Cortis' seems to be a mispronunciation; assume 'Yae Cortis' or another artist — keep proper nouns accurate. 'Like that' is informal; 'things like that' is clearer. Also commas improve clarity. Suggestion: add commas after introductory clauses and use clearer phrasing for examples and lists.

× Yes it does because when you hear a happy music, uh, you will feel more energetic and you can sing a song, uh, along with the music and yeah, make your day feel more, uh, meaningful.

✓ Yes, it does, because when you hear happy music, uh, you will feel more energetic and you can sing along with the music, and yeah, it can make your day feel more, uh, meaningful.

This provides a polished full-sentence correction: remove 'a' before 'happy music', add commas for natural pauses, change 'sing a song... along with' to 'sing along with', and supply 'it can' to complete the clause. Suggestions: use commas to mark pauses in speech transcripts and ensure determiners and subjects are correct.