Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and repetition. Correct possessive and verb forms (e.g., “one of my cousins,” “he gave it to me,” “I felt very happy”).

Example: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, one of my cousins lent me his bike, and I used to ride it every afternoon, which made me feel very happy and relaxed. Because I enjoyed it so much, I now own a bike.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, moreover, therefore). Correct phrasing and remove redundancy (e.g., "easily available and cheap" is enough; avoid repeating "as well as"). Add a brief specific example or comparison to strengthen the answer.

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. This is mainly because they are inexpensive and widely available, and because they are more convenient for short, congested routes. For example, commuters often choose bikes to reach work faster during rush hour, rather than sitting in traffic in a car.

× No, I actually did not have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I actually did not have a bike when I was a child.

No change needed; sentence is grammatically correct. It uses correct past tense and pronouns. Keep as is.

× Umm, but uh, my one of the cousin had so he gave me and I used to ride it and I was, I was feeling very pleasure and it relaxed my mind.

✓ Umm, but one of my cousins had a bike, so he gave it to me and I used to ride it; I felt very happy and it relaxed my mind.

Problems: word order and choice ('my one of the cousin' should be 'one of my cousins' — quantifier and noun phrase order), missing article and object placement ('gave me' -> 'gave it to me'), awkward adjective use ('feeling very pleasure' should be 'felt very happy' because 'pleasure' is a noun), tense consistency (use simple past 'felt' to match 'used to ride'). Suggestion: order quantifier before noun's possessive, use correct verb patterns 'give something to someone', and prefer 'felt happy' or 'took pleasure in' rather than 'feeling very pleasure'.

× Moreover, I love to take a ride on it.

✓ Moreover, I loved taking rides on it.

The context is past habitual action (childhood), so use past tense 'loved' and the gerund after 'love' when describing habitual actions ('loved taking rides'). 'Take a ride on it' is acceptable but 'taking rides on it' is more natural. Suggestion: match tense to context and use gerund for activities enjoyed.

× Now I have one.

✓ Now I have one.

Sentence is correct and concise; 'one' appropriately refers to 'a bike'. No change required.

× Yes, bikes are most popular in my country because the for most reason is that these are easily available as well as cheap.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because, for the most part, they are easily available and cheap.

Problems: unnecessary definite article and word order ('the for most reason' is incorrect; use 'for the most part' or 'main reason'), use of 'these are' is acceptable but 'they are' is more natural; 'most popular' without comparison needs modifier 'very' or rephrase. Suggestion: use idiomatic phrase 'for the most part' and 'they are easily available and cheap'.

× So instead of going to cars, people prefer to own a bike as it is more convenient as well as it can easily pass through the short routes.

✓ So instead of using cars, people prefer to own a bike because it is more convenient and can easily pass through short routes.

Problems: 'going to cars' is incorrect collocation — use 'using cars'. Repeated 'as' is awkward; use 'because' or a single conjunction. 'Can easily pass through the short routes' is wordy; 'can easily pass through short routes' is clearer. Suggestion: replace 'going to' with 'using', avoid repeating conjunctions, and simplify phrase order.