Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar, clarity and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence (“Yes, I did.”), correct past tense and pronouns, remove filler words (umm), and limit to up to 5 sentences. Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, where you rode it, how it looked, and what happened to it).

Example: Yes, I did. I had a small plastic bike when I was a child and I often rode it around my neighborhood and in front of my house. However, after a few years the bike broke because the frame was fragile. Because my family couldn’t afford a new one at the time, I mostly fixed it myself or borrowed other children’s bikes.

Suggestion: Focus on accurate vocabulary and sentence structure. Begin with a direct answer (“Yes, I think so.”), correct word choices (helmet, use bikes as transport), reduce hesitations, and finish your thought. Use linking words (for example, however, especially) and give a specific reason or example about when and why people cycle.

Example: Yes, I think bicycles are becoming very popular. For example, many teenagers and adults now wear helmets and ride bikes to work or school because cycling is cheap and good exercise. Especially on sunny days, people prefer cycling short distances rather than driving, and many cities have added bike lanes to support this trend.

× Well, umm, I think yes, I have a bike when I were a child, when I was a child and I played umm around the streets and also a home with this bike until I broke it and it's umm, I think it's made of plastic.

✓ Well, umm, I think yes, I had a bike when I was a child; I played around the streets and at home with this bike until I broke it, and I think it was made of plastic.

Errors: incorrect present tense 'have' for a past situation and wrong verb form 'were' for first person singular in past. Use past simple for past events ('had', 'was'). Also change 'also a home' to 'at home' for correct preposition and clarify sentence with punctuation. Suggestion: use past simple consistently for past experiences and correct subject-verb forms (I was, I had).

× This is the we were umm, poor that we cannot buy.

✓ We were poor, so we could not afford to buy one.

Errors: unnecessary 'This is the' and incorrect phrasing 'we were umm, poor that we cannot buy.' Use past tense 'were' and modal past 'could not' or 'couldn't' to express inability. Also add object 'one' to refer to the bike. Suggestion: simplify to a clear past statement using 'so' or 'so we could not...'.

× Yes, recently, many people, teenagers and even adults wearing a hamlet and ride a bike here and there.

✓ Yes, recently, many people, teenagers and even adults wear helmets and ride bikes here and there.

Errors: 'wearing' is a present participle but the sentence needs present simple for habitual action ('wear'). 'hamlet' is a misspelling of 'helmet' and 'ride a bike' should be plural 'ride bikes' to match plural subject. Suggestion: use present simple for general habits and correct vocabulary and number agreement.

× They use it to trans as a transport from one place to another uh, especially in the weather that's sunny and there is no raining in outside.

✓ They use it for transport from one place to another, especially when the weather is sunny and it is not raining outside.

Errors: 'to trans as a transport' is incorrect; use 'for transport'. 'in the weather that's sunny' should be 'when the weather is sunny'. 'there is no raining in outside' mixes structures; use 'it is not raining outside'. Suggestion: use 'for transport' and standard weather clauses: 'when the weather is...' and 'it is not raining outside'.

× Also it's very.

✓ Also, it is very common.

Error: sentence fragment lacking a complete predicate; 'it's very' is incomplete. Suggestion: complete the sentence with an adjective such as 'common', 'useful', or 'popular' to convey meaning.