Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cümlelerde gereksiz dolgu kelimeleri (uh, umm) çok fazla kullanılmış; akıcılığı azaltıyor. Ayrıca cümle yapısı karışık ve tekrarlar var. Daha net bir konu cümlesi kurup, sonrasında kısa ve destekleyici bir açıklama vermeniz gerekir. Örneğin: başlangıçta doğrudan cevap (Yes, I did.) verin, sonra bir veya iki kısa cümleyle deneyiminizi ve bir neden belirtin. Bağlaç (but, however) kullanarak mantıksal bağlantı oluşturun ve tekrarları çıkarın.

Example: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child, but I wasn’t very good at cycling. I practised a lot, however I found it difficult to keep my balance, which made me feel nervous at first.

Suggestion: Cevap doğrudan ve ilgili, fakat tekrarlar ve dilbilgisi hataları (I don't have precise statistics; specially → especially) var. Cümleleri kısaltıp tekrarı kaldırın ve daha spesifik örnek veya neden ekleyin (örn. who cycles, when, and why). Bağlaçlarla (for example, because) bilgiyi düzenleyin ve tek bir tutarlı açıklama yapın.

Example: I don’t have precise statistics, but from my observation bicycles are quite popular, especially along Baku Boulevard. For example, many families and young people cycle there in the evenings to enjoy the fresh air and scenery.

× I practice it a lot and I uh find uh, but uh, I found it umm hard to keep my balance and so I felt nervous uh.

✓ I practiced it a lot, but I found it hard to keep my balance, so I felt nervous.

The sentence mixes present tense verbs (practice, find) with past tense context (when you were a child). Use past tense consistently: 'practiced' and 'found'. Also remove filler words and redundant conjunctions to make the sentence clear. Suggestion: when describing past habits or experiences, keep verbs in past tense (I practiced, I found).

× I don't have a precise statistics but from my observation, bicycles are popular in my country, specially on Baku Blvd.

✓ I don't have precise statistics, but from my observation, bicycles are popular in my country, especially on Baku Boulevard.

'Statistics' can be used as uncountable, so 'a precise statistics' is incorrect; use 'precise statistics' or 'a precise statistic'. Also 'specially' is often used to mean 'for a special purpose'; use 'especially' for emphasis. 'Blvd.' should be written out as 'Boulevard' in formal speech. Suggestion: remove the article before 'statistics' and use 'especially'.

× Many people spend time their leisure time with leisure time with cycling in parks or Blvd. or their their garden.

✓ Many people spend their leisure time cycling in parks, on the boulevard, or in their gardens.

The original has repeated phrases and incorrect prepositions. Use 'spend their leisure time' (correct word order). Use prepositions: 'in parks', 'on the boulevard', 'in their gardens'. Also remove duplicate words. Suggestion: simplify to 'spend their leisure time cycling in parks, on the boulevard, or in their gardens.'

× Uh yes, I had a, a bike uh, when I was a child uh, but I wasn't uh very good at uh cycling, but uh, I practice it a lot and I uh find uh, but uh, I found it umm hard to keep my balance and so I felt nervous uh.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I wasn't very good at cycling; I practiced a lot, but I found it hard to keep my balance, so I felt nervous.

This long sentence mixes tenses and contains many fillers. Keep past tense for past experiences: 'had', 'wasn't', 'practiced', 'found', 'felt'. Remove filler sounds and redundant conjunctions, and combine clauses clearly. Suggestion: break long spoken sentences into clear clauses and keep consistent past tense.