Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and consistent with tense, remove fillers, and combine ideas into a clear short response. Start with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (why you received it and a brief memory). Use linking words like “because” or “and” to connect ideas.

Example: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child because my father bought it for my birthday as a way to help with my asthma. I remember riding it every afternoon around our neighborhood and feeling much healthier after exercising.

Suggestion: Give a clearer, more accurate description and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words (for example, “because” and “for example”) and correct vocabulary (e.g., “public bike-sharing system,” “app,” “rental fee,” and a clearer location name). Limit to 2–3 sentences with specific examples or statistics if possible.

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Korea because many cities have a public bike-sharing system. For example, in Seoul you can rent a bike through a mobile app for a small fee and use designated bike lanes across the city.

× Yes I do Umm I got a bike for my asthma gift.

✓ Yes I did. Umm I got a bike as a gift because of my asthma.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so 'do' is present tense and should be 'did'. Also 'for my asthma gift' is unnatural; use 'as a gift because of my asthma' to show reason. Use past tense consistently for past events. Suggestion: Use 'did' for past yes/no and reorder phrase to 'as a gift because of...'.

× My father gave me a bike as a birthday gift.

✓ My father gave me a bike as a birthday gift.

This sentence is grammatically correct and uses the simple past appropriately to describe a past event. No change required.

× Yes, I think it's pretty popular in Korea because there is a public bicycle on the road almost every everywhere in Salt Sea.

✓ Yes, I think it's quite popular in Korea because there are public bicycles on the roads almost everywhere in Seoul.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'there is' should be 'there are' to match plural 'public bicycles' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27 and 6). 'Almost every everywhere' is incorrect; use 'almost everywhere'. 'Salt Sea' seems to be a mispronunciation of 'Seoul', and 'on the road' should be plural 'on the roads'. Also 'pretty' is informal; 'quite' is a clearer alternative. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with plural nouns and use correct place names and common collocations like 'almost everywhere' and 'on the roads'.

× You can use it umm by paying some rent fee on a application.

✓ You can use it by paying a small rental fee through an app.

Article and word choice errors: 'a application' should be 'an app' (article error ID 22). 'Some rent fee' is unnatural; use 'a small rental fee'. 'On a application' should be 'through an app' or 'on an app' but 'through an app' is more natural. Also remove filler 'umm'. Suggestion: choose correct articles ('a' vs 'an') before vowel sounds and use common collocations like 'rental fee' and 'through an app'.