Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details using linking words, correct minor grammar and word order issues, and avoid redundancy. Aim for 2–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “gifted me” → “gave me”; “pink colour bike” → “a pink bike”).

Example: Yes. My father gave me a pink bike when I was about seven. He spent several evenings teaching me how to balance and pedal, and I remember feeling proud the first time I rode without help.

Suggestion: Improve coherence and grammar: open with a clear opinion, use linking words (for example, “because” or “during”), correct tense and article usage, and give one clear, specific reason or example. Avoid unclear phrases like “should block some Rd. passage.” Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, bikes became more popular during the COVID-19 pandemic because many people avoided public transport. For example, communities closed some streets to cars so people could cycle safely, and many families started cycling in the mornings and evenings to stay fit.

× Oh yes, my father gifted me a bike when I was maybe 7 to 8 years old.

✓ Oh yes, my father gave me a bike when I was about seven or eight years old.

'Gifted' is grammatically correct but 'gave' is more natural in this context; also 'maybe 7 to 8 years old' is awkward - use 'about seven or eight years old'. Use words for small numbers and the preposition 'about' for approximation.

× It was my pink colour bike which I used to ride it and my father helped me a lot to learn it.

✓ It was my pink bike, which I used to ride, and my father helped me a lot to learn.

'Pink colour bike' is incorrect word order; use 'pink bike'. Do not repeat the object with 'it' after 'ride' ('used to ride it' is redundant). Remove the extra 'it' at the end of the clause. Add commas to separate the nonrestrictive clause.

× It was quite a great experience.

✓ It was a great experience.

'Quite a great' is redundant and awkward; choose either 'quite an experience' or 'a great experience'. 'A great experience' is clearer and more natural.

× Yes, I do think bikes are quite popular in our country especially when there was corona time.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are quite popular in our country, especially during the coronavirus period.

Tense mismatch and unnatural phrase: 'are quite popular' (present) should match the time phrase. Use 'during the coronavirus period' or 'during the COVID-19 pandemic' instead of 'when there was corona time'. Add a comma before the subordinate phrase.

× A lot of people should block some Rd. passage and we used to ride our bicycles in the morning and evening to be fit especially when we are homes are all day.

✓ Many people blocked some road passages, and we used to ride our bicycles in the morning and evening to keep fit, especially when we were at home all day.

Multiple issues: 'should' is incorrect here; use past 'blocked' to describe what happened. 'Rd.' abbreviation is informal—use 'road'. 'To be fit' is better as 'to keep fit'. 'When we are homes are all day' is ungrammatical; correct to 'when we were at home all day'. Also add commas for clarity.