Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid filler words. Mention one or two specific details (type of bike, how you used it) and keep it to 2–3 sentences. Use past simple for past facts ("I had" not "I was having").

Example: Yes, I had a small red bicycle when I was a child. It had training wheels, and I used it to ride around my neighborhood every afternoon with my friends.

Suggestion: Answer directly and organize points using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete endings. Give one or two specific reasons or an example to support your view, and use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "elderly" instead of "old age people").

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and affordable for many people. In addition, elderly people often prefer bicycles for short trips since they are easier to park and maintain compared with cars.

× Yeah, I had a bike when I was good, So I was having, you know, that little cycle with some side tires as well, that one.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was young, so I had that little cycle with side wheels as well.

The student used 'when I was good' which is incorrect for age; the correct adjective is 'young'. Also 'I was having' is an incorrect past continuous here because possession in simple past should be used: 'I had'. Change 'side tires' to 'side wheels' or 'training wheels' for natural phrasing. Use lowercase after a comma and combine into one clear past-tense statement. Suggestions: replace 'good' with 'young', use simple past 'had' for possession, and use 'side wheels' or 'training wheels'.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because it's cheap to buy.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap to buy.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to the plural noun 'bikes'. Use 'they' to match plural noun. Also use 'are cheap' (plural) rather than 'it's cheap'. Suggestions: ensure pronouns agree in number with their nouns (they for plural).

× Also in my country even the older people, the old age people, they usually ride bikes because they can easily ride that instead of having cars.

✓ Also in my country even older people often ride bikes because they can easily ride them instead of owning cars.

Redundant and awkward phrases 'the older people, the old age people' should be simplified to 'older people'. Pronoun 'that' is incorrect for 'bikes' (plural); use 'them'. 'Having cars' is unnatural for possession; 'owning cars' or 'having cars' could work but 'owning' is better. 'Usually ride' changed to 'often ride' for natural collocation. Ensure pronouns agree in number. Suggestions: remove redundancy, use 'older people', use plural pronouns 'them', and use 'owning cars' or 'having cars' consistently.