Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar, tense and clarity. Use simple past tense for past events, correct word order, and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence and add one short supporting detail. For example, say who bought the bike, when you got it, and a brief comment about how you used it.

Example: Yes. My mother bought a bicycle for me when I was eight. I used it every day to ride around my neighborhood and to visit my friends, which helped me become more independent.

Suggestion: Clarify the main idea and use accurate vocabulary and sentence structure. Start with a clear opinion, then give a brief reason or example. Use linking words (however, but, because) correctly and avoid filler sounds. Mention the difference between bicycles and motorbikes if relevant.

Example: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorbikes or cars because they are faster and more convenient for commuting, so few people ride bicycles to work or school.

× Yes, I have my mother buy buy for me.

✓ Yes, my mother bought one for me.

The student is referring to a past event (having a bike as a child) so a past tense verb is required. The original uses present perfect structure 'I have' incorrectly and repeats 'buy'. Use simple past 'bought' to show a completed action in the past. Suggestion: use simple past for specific past events (e.g., 'My mother bought one for me').

× And come ashore, but I think, uh, everyone's has a motorbike car and I driving go to work or go to school.

✓ But I think almost everyone has a motorbike or a car, and they drive to work or to school.

Multiple problems: 'everyone's has' combines possessive contraction and a verb causing a subject-verb error — correct form is 'everyone has' (subject-verb agreement). 'Motorbike car' is incorrect — use 'motorbike or a car' (incorrect word choice and missing conjunction). 'I driving go to work' is ungrammatical: use correct subject and verb form 'they drive to work' to match general statement about people; or if speaking about the student personally, use 'I drive to work or to school.' Also 'come ashore' is irrelevant and likely incorrect phrase here and should be omitted. Suggestions: choose consistent subject (everyone/they or I), use present simple for habitual actions (have, has, drive), and use correct noun coordination with 'or'.