Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: もっと具体的に答え、論理的な流れを作ること。冒頭で簡潔に肯定し、その後で具体的なエピソード（何をどう共有するよう教えられたか、いつ教えられたか）を一つ挙げて説明してください。冗長な語句（例えば、繰り返しの “my parents told me”）や不要な言い淀みを減らしましょう。

Example: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was young. For example, my mother always encouraged me to share toys with my younger cousin at family gatherings, so I learned to think about others’ feelings early on.

Suggestion: 発言を簡潔にまとめ、冗長な自己評価（“I'm very good at”）やフィラー（uh）を控えてください。理由と具体例（どんな料理を誰とどのように共有するか）を一つ入れて、接続詞でつなぎ、自然な流れを作りましょう。

Example: I like to share the dishes I cook because cooking is my hobby. For instance, I often prepare homemade dumplings for my friends on weekends, and sharing them makes me feel proud and connected to others.

Suggestion: 意味が不明瞭な部分を明確にし、文法と語彙を正確に使ってください。理由を一つに絞り、短い具体例で補足しましょう。また途中で話が途切れているので文を完結させること。

Example: I think jewelry is not suitable to share because it is valuable and easy to lose. For example, I wouldn't lend my watch to a friend because I worry it might get damaged or misplaced.

Suggestion: 話の筋は良いですが、時制と語順を整え、フィラーを減らしてください。具体的な頻度や誰と共有したか（友達の反応など）を短く付け加えるとさらに良くなります。

Example: Yes. Recently I shared some novels by Haruki Murakami with my friends. Whenever he publishes a new book, I usually buy several copies and lend them to close friends so we can discuss the story together.

Suggestion: 言いたいことは明確ですが、文法ミスと冗長表現が多いです。冒頭で簡潔に答え、理由を一つ明示し、具体的な短い例で締めてください。余計な繰り返しを避け、自然な語順に直しましょう。

Example: I would share good news with my wife first because we live together and I trust her opinion. For example, when our dog learned a new trick, she was the first person I told because I knew she would be excited.

Suggestion: 内容を明確に整理し、適切な語彙と文法を使ってください。『経済に関するニュース』という主題を簡潔に述べ、なぜそれを共有するのか（例：留学費用の為の話し合い）を具体的に説明しましょう。

Example: Lately I share news about the economy with my friends because we are planning to study abroad and need to discuss exchange rates and costs. For example, I send articles about currency fluctuations so we can decide the best time to convert money.

× Yes, my parents told me to share when I was a child, for example.

✓ Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child, for example.

'Told me to share' is not wrong but 'taught me to share' is more appropriate to express instruction and learning in the past. Use past simple 'taught' because the action happened in the past.

× My parents told me that I should help people to share our happiness.

✓ My parents told me that I should help people and share our happiness.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes 'help people to share our happiness' which is awkward. Separate the actions with 'and' and use base verb forms. Maintain tense consistency: 'told' (past) with 'should' is acceptable.

× I would like to share with dishes which I cooked.

✓ I would like to share the dishes I cooked.

Do not use 'share with' plus the direct object here. Use 'share the dishes' or 'share my dishes' and use a reduced relative clause 'the dishes I cooked' rather than 'which I cooked' for naturalness.

× Uh, I really like cooking and uh, I'm very good at, uh, cooking.

✓ I really like cooking and I'm very good at it.

Avoid repeating 'cooking' and add 'it' as the object of 'good at'. This is natural English: 'good at it'.

× And whenever I saw a day eating them eating, uh, I feel very happy, uh, to fulfill my accomplishment, I would like to, uh, share with my dishes to others.

✓ Whenever I see people eating my food, I feel very happy and proud, so I like to share my dishes with others.

Original has tense inconsistencies and awkward phrases. Use present simple 'see' for habitual actions and correct noun phrases: 'people eating my food'. Replace 'to fulfill my accomplishment' with 'proud' and use 'share my dishes with others'.

× In my opinion, uh, the jewelry is not suitable for sharing because, uh, it has, uh, been evaluated highly and uh, people, uh, are willing to steal it, uh, if they are shared.

✓ In my opinion, jewelry is not suitable for sharing because it is valuable and people might steal it if it is shared.

Do not use 'the' before uncountable/general 'jewelry'. 'Evaluated highly' is unnatural; use 'valuable'. Use conditional 'might steal' and 'if it is shared' with correct passive reference.

× For example, uh, when I rent a link to my friend and he.

✓ For example, once I lent a necklace to my friend and he did not return it.

Original is incomplete and uses 'rent a link' incorrectly. Use past 'lent' for giving temporarily and complete the clause with consequence 'did not return it'.

× Yes, uh, I shared with my friends, uh, some books, uh, for example, uh, I love uh, the novel, uh, by Murakami Haruki.

✓ Yes, I recently shared some books with my friends. For example, I love the novels by Haruki Murakami.

Place 'shared some books with my friends' in natural order. 'The novel by Murakami Haruki' should be plural 'novels' if referring generally, and use the English name order 'Haruki Murakami'.

× And whenever, uh, he published a new novel, I will buy uh, three or four books and to share, uh, with my friends.

✓ Whenever he publishes a new novel, I buy three or four copies and share them with my friends.

Mixing past 'published' with future 'will buy' is inconsistent. Use present simple 'publishes' for habitual events and present simple 'buy' to express routine. Use 'copies' and 'share them with'.

× I believe that I would like to share good news with my wife.

✓ I would like to share good news with my wife.

Remove redundant 'I believe that' to be concise. The sentence is fine but redundancy should be avoided.

× I I send a life with her and the the longest time we have with my wife.

✓ I spend my life with her and we have been together for a long time.

Original has repetition and wrong verbs: 'send a life' incorrect. Use 'spend my life' and express duration with 'have been together for a long time'.

× For example when my dog is learning. So happily I told that thing to my wife firstly.

✓ For example, when my dog learned a trick, I happily told my wife first.

Use past tense 'learned' for a completed event and 'told' in past. 'Firstly' is awkward in this context; use 'first'.

× I usually share the news regarding economics with my friends recently and my friend are talking about studying abroad and we need to exchange my money, so we are caring and the economy.

✓ Recently I usually share economic news with my friends. My friends are talking about studying abroad and we need to exchange money, so we are concerned about the economy.

Tense and agreement errors: use 'Recently I usually' or 'Recently I have been sharing'. 'Friend are' -> 'friends are'. 'Exchange my money' -> 'exchange money'. 'Caring and the economy' -> 'concerned about the economy'.

× So I shared that news.

✓ So I shared that news with them.

Add 'with them' to clarify who received the news. Pronoun object is necessary for clarity.