Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense errors, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific examples. Use linking words like "for example" or "so" to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, definitely. My parents taught me to share from a young age. For example, they encouraged me to lend notebooks to classmates and to share my ideas during group projects, which helped me build friendships and show care.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct vocabulary and grammar. Begin with a direct topic sentence about what you share now (or used to). Explain briefly why your behaviour changed using specific reasons and a linking word like "because" or "however." Avoid repetition and vague phrases.

Example: I used to share toys and books as a child, but now I rarely share personal items. This is because of privacy and security concerns online, for example I avoid lending my phone or sharing account details to prevent fraud.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and two specific examples with concise reasons. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid filler words. Use linking words like "because" or "for instance."

Example: I think some items are not suitable for sharing. For instance, personal clothing should not be shared because it can spread infections, and I also avoid sharing money because financial matters are private.

Suggestion: Answer directly and briefly with correct tense and word order. Use a clear topic sentence and an optional brief reason. Avoid repeating earlier statements; be specific about time and person if needed.

Example: No, I haven't shared anything recently. I avoided sharing items with friends last month because I prefer to keep personal belongings private.

Suggestion: Give a concise topic sentence naming the person, then add one clear reason with a linking word like "because". Correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Include a brief example of what kind of news you would share.

Example: I would share good news with my parents, especially my mother. I would tell them because they always support and advise me; for example, I would tell them if I received a scholarship so they could celebrate with me.

Suggestion: Be specific and structured: start with a topic sentence about the types of news you share, then give examples using linking words like "for example" or "such as." Correct grammar and unnecessary hesitations.

Example: I usually share practical news with my friends, such as exam announcements and sports results. For example, if an exam date is released or a team wins a match, I immediately send a message to let them know.

× 'My parents always allow me to share when I was a child.'

✓ 'My parents always allowed me to share when I was a child.'

'allow' is in simple present but the time phrase 'when I was a child' refers to the past; subject 'my parents' with past time needs past tense 'allowed'. Use consistent past tense: 'always allowed'. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when referring to completed past periods.'

× 'They always ask me to share some of my notebooks, share my ideas with my friends so then so that I can get to know to show my love and affection for them.'

✓ 'They always asked me to share some of my notebooks and to share my ideas with my friends so that I could show my love and affection for them.'

Run-on and mixed verb forms: 'ask me to share' should match past tense 'asked' because context is past; remove redundant phrases 'so then to get to know to show' and use 'so that I could show' for purpose. Use parallel infinitive forms 'to share ... and to share ...'. Suggestion: Break complex thoughts into clear clauses and keep verb forms parallel and consistent.

× 'Well honestly in my childhood I usually hear my things with others but nowadays I don't prefer to share my things with others as I think due to advancement in technology many people are doing different type of frauds.'

✓ 'Well honestly, in my childhood I usually shared my things with others, but nowadays I don't prefer to share my things with others because I think that due to advancements in technology many people commit different types of fraud.'

'hear' is incorrect verb; context requires past 'shared'. 'Due to advancement' needs plural 'advancements' or 'the advancement' and 'many people are doing different type of frauds' is unnatural—use 'commit fraud' or 'commit different types of fraud'. Also add comma after 'honestly' and use 'because' rather than 'as' for clarity. Suggestion: Choose verbs that match meaning ('share' not 'hear'), make noun number consistent ('advancements'), and use standard collocations ('commit fraud').

× 'So I don't think I I can share my things right now with others.'

✓ 'So I don't think I can share my things right now with others.'

'I I' is a typo with repeated pronoun; no third person issue but repetition is erroneous. Removing the duplicate fixes sentence. Suggestion: Proofread for repeated words.

× 'Well I think more important things that are not suitable for sharing is a clothes.'

✓ 'Well I think more important things that are not suitable for sharing are clothes.'

'things' is plural, so verb must be plural 'are'; 'a clothes' is incorrect because 'clothes' is plural and does not take 'a'. Use 'are clothes' or 'is a piece of clothing' for singular. Suggestion: Match noun number with articles and verbs: use 'are clothes' or 'is a piece of clothing'.

× 'Cause clothes are our personal things that we don't have to share as we can spread different type of infections through the through our clothes and we don't have to share our money with the people.'

✓ 'Because clothes are our personal items that we shouldn't share, as we can spread different types of infections through our clothes, and we don't have to share our money with other people.'

'Cause' is informal; use 'Because'. 'Different type of infections' should be 'different types of infections'. 'Through the through our clothes' is repetitive. 'Share our money with the people' should be 'with other people'. Also use 'shouldn't' instead of 'don't have to' if implying advisability. Suggestion: Avoid repetition, use correct plural forms for 'types', and prefer 'other people' for general others.

× 'As I mentioned before, I usually do not prefer to share things with others, so I didn't share it recently anything with my one of my friend or any anyone else.'

✓ 'As I mentioned before, I usually do not prefer to share things with others, so I didn't share anything recently with one of my friends or anyone else.'

'didn't share it recently anything' has word order errors and extra pronouns; 'my one of my friend' is incorrect—use 'one of my friends'. Keep 'didn't share anything recently' for negative past. Suggestion: Use correct word order for negatives ('didn't share anything recently') and correct pluralization for 'friends'.

× 'I would like to choose my mom or dad to share a good news with them 'cause I think they always help me in whenever no matter I am in a good or a bad situation, they always guide me to do whatever I want which will make my future success.'

✓ 'I would like to tell my mom or dad good news because I think they always help me whenever I am in a good or bad situation; they always guide me to do what I want, which will help my future success.'

'Choose' is awkward—'tell' or 'share with' is better. 'Share a good news' is incorrect article use: 'good news' is uncountable, so no 'a'. Remove ''cause' and use 'because'. 'Help me in whenever no matter I am' is ungrammatical—use 'whenever I am in a good or bad situation'. 'Do whatever I want which will make my future success' should be 'do what I want, which will help my future success.' Suggestion: Use correct verbs ('tell'), avoid articles with uncountable nouns ('good news'), and simplify clauses for clarity.

× 'Well, I usually share different type of news with my friends whenever I use my phone.'

✓ 'Well, I usually share different types of news with my friends whenever I use my phone.'

'Different type of news' should be plural 'different types of news' because 'different' refers to multiple kinds. Suggestion: Use plural 'types' after 'different' when referring to multiple categories.

× 'I when I watch any kind of news which is related to historical exam declaration or maybe a sport.'

✓ 'When I watch any kind of news related to historical events, exam announcements, or sports, I share it.'

Fragment and word order issues: sentence begins with 'I when I watch' creating a fragment. 'Historical exam declaration' is unclear—likely 'historical events' and 'exam announcements'; 'maybe a sport' should be 'or sports'. Completed sentence clarifies the action. Suggestion: Ensure each clause has a clear subject and verb; list items in parallel form.