Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement, and avoid redundant phrases. Use one clear supporting example with linking words (e.g., "For example").

Example: Yes. My parents taught me to share because they believed it showed kindness and helped build good relationships. For example, if a friend forgets their lunch, I would share mine so we can eat together and I can help them out.

Suggestion: Clarify meaning and correct pronunciation/grammar. Give specific examples and use linking words like "Also" or "Additionally." Avoid confusing or contradictory sentences and keep to under five sentences.

Example: I like to share experiences and practical items. For example, I often share clothes with close friends if they need an outfit for a party. I also sometimes lend a small amount of money to trusted friends, but only when I’m sure they will repay me soon.

Suggestion: Good idea and relevant examples, but improve accuracy and vocabulary. Use correct terms (personal hygiene) and remove unclear phrases ("screen problems"). Structure: topic sentence + brief reason + examples.

Example: I think personal hygiene items should not be shared because they can spread infections. For example, razors, toothbrushes and undergarments should be kept personal to avoid health risks.

Suggestion: Make the answer clearer and grammatically correct. Use past tense consistently and give concise details: who, what, why, and outcome. Avoid slang like "wanna."

Example: Yes. Recently I lent a dress to a friend who needed it for a party. She wore it and then returned it after having it dry-cleaned, so it came back in good condition.

Suggestion: Be concise and correct idiomatic expressions. Use one clear topic sentence, then a brief reason and a specific recent example. Fix collocations ("stands by me", "thick and thin").

Example: I would tell my father first because he always stands by me and supports me. For instance, when I got good marks last term, I told him and we celebrated by having a cup of tea together.

Suggestion: Make sentences more natural and avoid repetition. Start with a topic sentence, then give two specific types of news with brief reasons and linking words (e.g., "Also").

Example: I usually share personal achievements with friends because they encourage me. I also tell them about local events or concerts so we can plan to go out and have fun together.

× My parents taught me some lessons for sharing as they believe it showed a kindness toward other person and builds better relationship between them.

✓ My parents taught me some lessons about sharing because they believed it showed kindness toward other people and built better relationships between us.

Pronoun and reference errors: 'other person' should be plural 'other people' to match general meaning; 'they believe' conflicts with past 'taught' so use past 'believed' for tense consistency; 'a kindness' is unnecessary article, use 'kindness'; 'builds better relationship between them' incorrect reference — use 'built better relationships between us' to show parents and child.

× For instance, if my friend forgot their lunch, then I prefer to share that lunch with him so that we can have a better one together.

✓ For instance, if my friend forgot his lunch, I would share it with him so that we could eat together.

Pronoun and verb form issues: 'their' is singular-plural mismatch with 'my friend' (use 'his' if gender known); tense and modality: use conditional 'would' instead of present 'prefer' to match hypothetical past 'forgot'; 'a better one' is vague — use 'eat together'.

× Will I like to share the different kind of experiences throughout my life because it helps to build the connection between the two persons.

✓ I would like to share the different kinds of experiences from my life because they help build connections between people.

Modal and structure: 'Will I like' is incorrect for expressing preference — use 'I would like'; 'different kind' should be plural 'different kinds'; 'throughout my life' -> 'from my life' fits context; 'it helps' should be 'they help' to agree with plural 'experiences'; 'the connection between the two persons' unnatural — use 'connections between people'.

× Secondly, I prefer to lend my money or my clothes to my friends and after they use my friend, you can easily return at the shorter time, for instance, less time.

✓ Secondly, I prefer to lend money or clothes to my friends, and after they use them, they can return them quickly, for example, after a short time.

Pronoun confusion and reference: 'after they use my friend' is nonsensical — should be 'after they use them'; 'you can easily return' incorrect subject — use 'they can return them'; 'at the shorter time' should be 'after a short time' or 'quickly'.

× I lend my close to my best friends so that he can go to a party.

✓ I lend my clothes to my best friends so that they can go to a party.

Spelling and pronoun agreement: 'close' should be 'clothes'; 'my best friends' is plural, so use plural pronoun 'they' not 'he'.

× Well, I believe that person hygiene items are not good for sharing because it can cause some infectious disease and cause some screen problems.

✓ Well, I believe that personal hygiene items are not good to share because they can cause infectious diseases and other health problems.

Word choice and agreement: 'person hygiene' should be 'personal hygiene'; 'items are not good for sharing' -> 'not good to share'; 'it can cause' should be 'they can cause' to match plural 'items'; 'infectious disease' -> plural 'infectious diseases'; 'screen problems' unclear — replace with 'other health problems'.

× So it's the best that we keep these items to themselves.

✓ So it is best that we keep these items to ourselves.

Reflexive pronoun error: 'themselves' refers to third person; speaker should use 'ourselves' when including speaker and listeners.

× And these items are like razors, toothbrushes or undergarments should not be shared by anyone.

✓ Items such as razors, toothbrushes, and undergarments should not be shared by anyone.

Awkward structure: remove 'are like' and reorder to 'Items such as...' for a clear list; punctuation and conjunctions corrected.

× As I really remember last time I shared my clothes to my friends because he wanna go to party and after wearing this dress and by the dry cleaning he can throw the dress to be back again.

✓ If I remember correctly, the last time I shared my clothes with my friends was because he wanted to go to a party, and after wearing the dress he could send it to the dry cleaner to get it back.

Tense and verb forms: 'As I really remember last time' -> 'If I remember correctly' or 'the last time I shared'; 'shared my clothes to' -> 'shared my clothes with'; 'he wanna' -> 'he wanted to' (colloquial and incorrect); 'after wearing this dress and by the dry cleaning he can throw the dress to be back again' is unclear — express as 'send it to the dry cleaner to get it back' with correct modal 'could' for past context.

× All I would like to talk about my father because he is the one person who always stand beside my back and always support me in my thick and sins of a life.

✓ I would like to talk about my father because he is the one person who always stands by my side and always supports me in the thick and thin of life.

Pronoun and phrase corrections: 'All I would like to talk about' unnecessary 'All'; subject-verb agreement: 'always stand' -> 'always stands'; preposition and idiom: 'stand beside my back' -> 'stands by my side'; 'thick and sins of a life' wrong idiom -> 'thick and thin of life'.

× And whenever I achieve something good then I prefer to tell him because we can share a happy time together and last time when I achieve good marks in my exam we prefer to sit and have a cup of.

✓ Whenever I achieve something good, I prefer to tell him because we can share a happy time together. Last time when I achieved good marks on my exam, we sat and had a cup of tea.

Tense consistency and incomplete phrase: mix of present and past -> use past 'achieved' for the specific past event; 'prefer to tell him' fine for habitual action; 'have a cup of' incomplete — specify 'a cup of tea'; 'we prefer to sit' should be past 'we sat' to match the event.

× I usually hear updates with my friends about my personal achievements as whenever I did something good in my life and achieve something good, then I prefer to talk with my friends so that they can also encourage me.

✓ I usually share updates with my friends about my personal achievements. Whenever I do something good, I prefer to tell my friends so that they can encourage me.

Verb and preposition usage: 'hear updates with my friends' should be 'share updates with my friends'; tense consistency: mix of past 'did' and present 'achieve' corrected to present 'do' and 'do' for habitual action; simplify sentence for clarity.

× Apart from that, I prefer to share some local events with my friends so that we can hang out together and have some fun with each other.

✓ Apart from that, I prefer to share information about local events with my friends so that we can hang out and have fun together.

Minor wording and redundancy: 'share some local events' unclear — 'share information about local events' is clearer; 'have some fun with each other' redundant — 'have fun together' is concise.