Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and grammatical errors, and give a specific detail about why it impressed you. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes. A product placement for Shuha milk in the movie Transformers impressed me when I was a child because the characters kept drinking it in funny ways. As a result, the milk brand became memorable to me and I even asked my parents to buy it because the scenes were so striking.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct vocabulary and structure. Give a brief topic sentence, then add a specific example and use a linking word to make the answer coherent.

Example: Yes, I see many advertisements on public transport. For example, there are large poster campaigns on metro station walls and ads inside trains, so commuters are exposed to them every day.

Suggestion: State your opinion clearly and support it with a specific reason and a linking word. Correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms) and avoid vague words like "disturbed."

Example: No, I don't like most advertisements because they are often boring and their repeated play becomes annoying. For instance, repeated TV jingles can interrupt a show and make me change the channel.

Suggestion: Be specific and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give concrete examples and explain why they appeal to you. Fix grammar and unclear references (e.g., "AL's English test").

Example: I like creative advertisements because they are memorable and explain a product's benefits clearly. For example, an IELTS ad that shows real students improving their scores and getting study visas convinced me of the test's value because it used before-and-after examples and testimonials.

Suggestion: Use more formal language and avoid fillers. Give a concise topic sentence, then a specific detail about where and how often you see ads, and one consequence or feeling about it.

Example: Yes, I see advertisements frequently on my phone and computer. For example, on YouTube I watch short ads before videos because I don't have a premium subscription, so I often have to wait 5–15 seconds before my video starts.

× I still remember and product placement of Shuha milk in the movie Transformers made a big impression when I was little.

✓ I still remember the product placement of Shuha milk in the movie Transformers that made a big impression when I was little.

The original sentence has a missing connector and incorrect verb form: 'and product placement' is ungrammatical. This is a sentence structure error that involves the present participle idea (describing what was remembered). Correct by adding 'the' before 'product placement' and linking it with 'that' to form a relative clause: 'the product placement ... that made'. This produces a clear subject and clause structure.

× Uh, you know, it is quite weird actually of people sucking this jaw and making all the weird sounds.

✓ Uh,