Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and accurate with grammar and choose clearer phrases. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific details (why it impressed you). Use linking words and correct tense/forms (e.g., “had” vs “has”, “a very adorable voice” → “a very cute voice”). Avoid repetition.

Example: A memorable childhood advertisement for me was the Haribo Jelly commercial. It featured a man with a very cute, distinctive voice, and although the clip was short, the catchy jingle and visuals stuck in my mind.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer and then add a specific example or brief reason. Fix grammar and unnecessary words (e.g., “I see a lot of ads on public transport” not “see often a lot”). Avoid vague phrases like “cannot think of any anything” — instead say you can’t recall a specific one right now.

Example: Yes, I see a lot of ads on trains and buses. For example, recently I noticed large posters for a new phone model covering the train carriage, which made them hard to miss.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and give one or two precise reasons. Correct grammar (plural/singular, word order: “advertisements” and “services that reduce ads are really useful”). Use linking words like “so” or “because” to connect ideas neatly, but avoid repetition.

Example: No, I don't like advertisements because I find them intrusive. Therefore, I subscribe to ad-free services, which I find useful since they remove most interruptions.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a topic sentence naming the type of advertising, then give a clear reason and an example. Remove filler words (umm) and correct word order (e.g., “ads that feature cute characters”). Use one linking word to add detail.

Example: I prefer ads that feature cute characters and humour because they feel friendly and memorable. For instance, the Haribo Jelly ad with its charming mascot always made me smile.

Suggestion: Give a concise direct answer, then a specific effect or example. Correct grammar (“on my phone or computer”, “it annoys me” or “they annoy me”). Use linking words like “and” or “so” to connect cause and effect, and avoid redundancy (“quite often” or “a lot” alone is enough).

Example: Yes, I often see many ads on my phone and computer, and they annoy me because they interrupt what I'm doing and slow down pages.

× It shows a man who has a voice, very adorable voice.

✓ It shows a man who has a very adorable voice.

The original sentence misses the article 'a' before 'very adorable voice'. This is an article and adjective order issue but best classified as present participle context of description; adding 'a' makes the noun phrase grammatical. Suggestion: include the appropriate article before a singular countable noun and keep adjective order 'very adorable voice'.

× It's a very short video but has a very strong impression.

✓ It's a very short video but leaves a very strong impression.

The verb 'has' is not idiomatic with 'impression' in this context. Use 'leave' to describe something that causes an impression. Also maintain simple present tense 'leaves' to match the general fact. Suggestion: use verbs that collocate correctly (e.g., 'leave an impression').

× Yes, I see often a lot of advertising on transportation, but I cannot think of any anything.

✓ Yes, I often see a lot of advertising on public transport, but I cannot think of any particular one.

'See often' has incorrect adverb placement; 'often' should come before the main verb 'see'. 'Transportation' is less natural here than 'public transport' or 'transport'. 'Any anything' is redundant; use 'any particular one' or 'anything in particular'. Suggestion: place frequency adverbs before the main verb and avoid redundant phrases.

× No, I don't like advertisement, so I often pay for a service which reduce advertisement.

✓ No, I don't like advertisements, so I often pay for a service that reduces advertisements.

'Advertisement' should be plural here ('advertisements') as a general uncountable/plural concept; 'which reduce' has subject-verb agreement issue and relative pronoun choice—use 'that reduces' with singular 'service'. Also pluralize 'advertisements' to match general reference. Suggestion: use plural for general counts and ensure subject-verb agreement in relative clauses.

× They really useful for me because I don't see any advertisement anymore.

✓ They are really useful for me because I don't see any advertisements anymore.

The sentence omits the auxiliary verb 'are' for the adjective 'useful'. Also 'advertisement' should be plural. Suggestion: include the correct form of 'be' when using adjectives and use plural for general countable nouns.

× I like umm A advertisement which in contain the adorable shows such as Haribo Jelly advertisement.

✓ I like an advertisement that contains adorable scenes, such as the Haribo Jelly advertisement.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound ('advertisement'). 'Which in contain' is ungrammatical; use 'that contains'. 'Adorable shows' is odd—'adorable scenes' or 'cute characters' fits better. Include 'the' before a specific ad 'Haribo Jelly advertisement'. Suggestion: choose correct article 'a/an/the', use 'that contains' for defining clauses, and use natural collocations like 'contains adorable scenes'.

× Yes, I quite often see a lot of advertisement via my phones and computer and it makes me annoying.

✓ Yes, I quite often see a lot of advertisements on my phone and computer, and it annoys me.

'Advertisement' should be plural ('advertisements'). Use 'on' rather than 'via' for screens/devices. 'Phones' should be singular 'phone' if referring to the personal device or 'my phones' only if multiple; here 'my phone and computer' is natural. 'It makes me annoying' is incorrect; use 'it annoys me' or 'it makes me annoyed'. Suggestion: pluralize general nouns, use correct prepositions with devices, and use correct causative/adjective forms for feelings.