Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct tense and word choices, and limit to up to 4–5 sentences. Use linking words like “for example” or “also” to connect ideas. Add a brief frequency indicator (e.g., ‘occasionally’ or ‘several times a year’).

Ejemplo: Yes, I like buying shoes, especially sports shoes for specific activities. For example, I buy hiking boots when I go hiking and running shoes when I train for races. I usually buy new shoes a few times a year, depending on my needs.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer and succinct supporting detail. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Mention one or two specific reasons or outcomes (e.g., convenience, delivery). Keep it to 1–3 sentences and use linking words like “because” or “so”.

Ejemplo: Yes, I bought shoes online in 2020 during the COVID lockdown because shops were closed and online shopping was more convenient. I found it easy to compare prices and have items delivered to my home.

Sugerencia: Provide a direct estimate or range to answer the question, then briefly explain your strategy. Use quantifiers (e.g., ‘around $50–$100’ or ‘not much’) and linking words like ‘so’ or ‘therefore’. Avoid vague phrases like ‘every shop’ and unnecessary repetition.

Ejemplo: I usually spend around $40–$80 on a pair of shoes because I tend to look for the best price. Therefore, I compare stores and wait for sales to avoid spending more than necessary.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a clear preference or say it depends, then give two concise, specific examples. Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing. Use linking words like ‘for example’ or ‘however’ and correct collocations (e.g., ‘taking photos’ instead of ‘clicking your pictures’).

Ejemplo: It depends on the situation. For example, I choose fashionable shoes when I’m traveling or taking photos, but I always choose comfortable shoes for running or long walks.

× I do like buying shoes, especially, uh, when they're when I had to go somewhere like hiking or I even take a part in racing competition.

✓ I do like buying shoes, especially when I have to go somewhere like hiking or when I take part in a racing competition.

The original mixes past tense 'had' with present habits and uses 'take a part in' instead of the correct verb phrase 'take part in'. Use present simple 'have' and 'take' for habitual actions. Remove the duplicated 'when' and unnecessary filler. Suggestion: Use consistent tense for habits (present simple) and the fixed expression 'take part in'. ID:9,6,8

× And I love buying sports suits for whenever I need them.

✓ And I love buying sports suits for whenever I need them.

This sentence is acceptable but slightly awkward because 'for whenever' is redundant. Prefer 'and I love buying sports suits when I need them.' This clarifies timing and improves flow. ID:13

× I did buy shoes online in 2020 during the COVID because we were trapped in lockdown and every the the online shopping was quite famous.

✓ I bought shoes online in 2020 during COVID because we were trapped in lockdown and online shopping became very popular.

Use simple past 'bought' rather than 'did buy' for a straightforward statement. Remove extra 'the' articles and replace 'quite famous' with 'very popular' which is more natural. 'Became' shows change in popularity in the past. ID:5,22,11

× Whenever I buy shoes, I explore every shop and try to find where I can buy it the cheapest price because I don't want to spend my money more.

✓ Whenever I buy shoes, I explore every shop and try to find where I can buy them at the cheapest price because I don't want to spend more money.

Pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'shoes' (pronoun error). Use 'at the cheapest price' or 'for the lowest price' to express purpose; remove extra 'my' before money. Place 'more' after 'spend' as 'spend more money'. ID:1,12,11

× Actually it depends because whenever I have to go somewhere like for clicking your pictures and traveling, I will like to choose fashionable shoes or whereas I have I have to go for marathon running, I will choose comfortable.

✓ Actually it depends: whenever I have to go somewhere to take pictures or travel, I prefer to choose fashionable shoes, whereas if I have to go for marathon running, I choose comfortable ones.

Use 'to take pictures' instead of 'for clicking your pictures' (incorrect verb and pronoun). 'I will like to choose' is awkward; use 'I prefer to choose' or 'I choose'. Maintain parallel structure and correct repetition 'I have I have'. Use 'comfortable ones' for the plural noun 'shoes'. ID:6,12,13,26