Rules— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two concise supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "first" and "also") and correct verb forms and articles. Keep to under five sentences and avoid unclear words (e.g., "steal").

Ejemplo: Yes. At my high school, students are not allowed to use mobile phones during lessons. First, we must leave our phones in our lockers before class. Also, this rule helps students concentrate better and reduces distractions during lessons.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and organize ideas: state your opinion, then give specific reasons and a brief balancing comment. Use linking words like "for example" and "however" correctly and watch word choice (e.g., "discipline" not "disciplines of shoes").

Ejemplo: It depends on the type of rule. For example, banning phones in class is useful because it improves concentration. However, schools should avoid overly strict rules and balance discipline with students' freedom.

Sugerencia: Be specific and correct grammar: use past tense consistently and correct object forms (e.g., "explained to me" not "explained me"). Provide two clear examples of the teacher's dedication and end with the effect on you. Avoid fragments and questions at the end.

Ejemplo: Yes. I had a very dedicated teacher who often stayed after school to give me extra Japanese lessons. He explained difficult grammar points to me and recommended useful textbooks. As a result, he encouraged me to practice every day and my speaking improved.

Sugerencia: Give a clear preference in one sentence, then add concise reasons with linking words. Correct vocabulary and phrasing (e.g., "have fewer rules" or "fewer rules, because they encourage freedom and creativity"). Avoid unclear words like "shoot", "Ferru", and "move".

Ejemplo: I would prefer fewer rules because they encourage freedom and creativity among students. However, basic rules should remain for safety and order, while unnecessary regulations could be removed.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, use correct tense and pronouns, and give specific examples of strictness and its effects. Use linking words like "for example" and avoid incomplete sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a very strict teacher who insisted on punctuality. For example, if students arrived late they were assigned extra homework. Because of his rules, most students learned to be on time.

Sugerencia: State your opinion clearly in one sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words like "because" and "therefore." Use correct grammar and concise phrasing.

Ejemplo: No, I would not. I believe rules are necessary so teachers can manage students effectively, and clear rules help create a productive learning environment.

× Yes, in my high school the students are not allowed to use the mobile phone during the class.

✓ Yes, in my high school students are not allowed to use mobile phones during class.

Incorrect use of definite article 'the' before general nouns. Use plural 'mobile phones' and omit 'the' when speaking generally; also omit 'the' before 'class' for general situations. Improve by using plural and dropping unnecessary articles.

× So the student before the class need to put their mobile phones and their locker.

✓ So students need to put their mobile phones in their lockers before class.

Subject-verb number mismatch and singular/plural inconsistency: 'the student' with 'their' is inconsistent. Also wrong preposition and word order. Use plural 'students' with plural verb form 'need', 'in their lockers', and place time expression 'before class' at end or start for natural order.

× This helps steal them to stay to have more concentrate and.

✓ This helps them stay focused and concentrate more.

Sentence is ungrammatical and contains wrong words ('steal', misplaced infinitives). Use correct object pronoun 'them', verb phrase 'stay focused', and adverb 'more' placed after verb. Keep structure concise.

× Though I think that it depends on the rule.

✓ I think it depends on the rule.

Unnecessary conjunction 'Though' at sentence start creates awkwardness. Removing it yields a clear present-tense opinion. Keep tense consistent with question.

× For example, if the restriction on using the mobile phone during the class, I think it's understandable because this helps students more concentrate, but the school needs to balance between freedom and disciplines of shoes.

✓ For example, if there is a restriction on using mobile phones during class, I think it's understandable because it helps students concentrate more, but the school needs to balance freedom and discipline.

Multiple errors: missing 'there is' (there be issue), article misuse, pluralization, incorrect word order 'more concentrate' should be 'concentrate more', and wrong noun 'disciplines of shoes'. Replace with 'discipline'. Also use 'mobile phones' plural and omit 'the' before 'class'.

× Oh yes, I have one teacher who often stays late after class to teach me the Japanese.

✓ Oh yes, I have one teacher who often stays late after class to teach me Japanese.

Unnecessary definite article 'the' before languages; 'Japanese' as a language does not need 'the'. Tense 'have' and 'stays' are fine for present habitual action.

× He always explained me about the grammar and vocabulary.

✓ He always explained grammar and vocabulary to me.

Verb 'explain' takes indirect object with 'to' or direct object: 'explain something to someone'. 'Explained me' is incorrect. Place 'to me' after object.

× I'm recommending useful textbooks for me as well.

✓ He recommended useful textbooks to me as well.

Tense and subject error: context refers to past habitual actions by the teacher, so use past 'recommended' and 'he' as subject. Also use 'recommended ... to me' rather than 'for me' here.

× He encouraged me to practice every day and ritual. How?

✓ He encouraged me to practice every day and follow a routine.

Awkward phrasing 'and ritual. How?' Replace 'ritual' with 'routine' and make complete sentence. 'How?' seems stray and should be removed.

× Well if I had to shoot I would prefer Ferru because they're encouraged to them the freedom and creativity as well.

✓ Well, if I had to choose, I would prefer fewer rules because they encourage freedom and creativity as well.

'Had to shoot' is incorrect word choice; likely 'choose'. 'Ferru' -> 'fewer rules'. 'They're encouraged to them the freedom' is ungrammatical and pronoun misuse. Use 'they encourage' and correct pluralization 'fewer rules'.

× However, the basic move need to be maintained for safety and other reasons, but removing some unnecessary would have students.

✓ However, basic rules need to be maintained for safety and other reasons, but removing some unnecessary rules would benefit students.

Many word errors: 'move' -> 'rules', subject-verb agreement 'need' should be 'need' with plural 'rules' (already correct), missing noun after 'unnecessary', wrong word order 'would have students' should be 'would benefit students'.

× Yes, I had one teacher who was very strict on time.

✓ Yes, I had one teacher who was very strict about punctuality.

'Strict on time' is awkward; use 'strict about punctuality' for natural phrasing. Past tense 'had' and 'was' are correct.

× So the student needs to be on time for the class.

✓ So students needed to be on time for class.

Consistency with past context: earlier sentence uses past 'I had', so change to past habitual 'students needed'. Also use plural 'students' and omit 'the' before 'class' for general reference.

× If not they will order more homework to you.

✓ If not, they would assign more homework to you.

'Order more homework to you' is incorrect verb choice and preposition. Use 'assign homework to you' or 'give you more homework'. Also match conditional modality: past context could use 'would'.

× So he's always.

✓ So he was always strict about it.

Sentence fragment 'So he's always.' is incomplete. Replace with full clause matching past tense and meaning: 'he was always strict about it'.

× No, I thought, because I think that the rule is necessary for a teacher to control the student as well.

✓ No, I don't think so, because I think rules are necessary for teachers to control students as well.

Tense inconsistency: 'No, I thought' incorrect for current opinion. Use present 'I don't think so'. Use plural 'rules', 'teachers', and 'students' for general statements.

× This helps the education more effectively.

✓ This helps education be more effective.

Awkward adverb placement 'more effectively' with 'helps the education'. Use 'help education be more effective' or 'improves education's effectiveness'. Also remove unnecessary 'the' before 'education'.