Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler ("umm"), correct verb forms and use linking words to list hobbies. Limit to 3–4 short sentences and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: I have several hobbies. I enjoy painting and dancing, and I also play the guitar in my free time. Additionally, I like stitching clothes when I want to relax.

Sugerencia: Use a direct topic sentence and improve coherence with linking words. Remove filler words and be specific about activities or frequency. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. As a child I often tried new activities such as painting and dancing, and I spent many evenings playing with friends and helping my family at home.

Sugerencia: Good content and specificity. Improve grammar and remove repetition: use correct tense and combine sentences with linking words. Limit to three sentences and avoid sentence fragments.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have painted since childhood. I used to carry a sketchbook everywhere, and even now I try to paint regularly in my leisure time to relax and improve my skills.

Sugerencia: Correct subject-verb agreement and reduce filler. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give brief specific examples using linking words (e.g., "for example"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: No, we have different hobbies. For example, I enjoy painting, my brother prefers working on computers, my mother likes sewing, and my father enjoys listening to music.

× Yes, I have a variety of hobbies as I like doing the different things at different times.

✓ Yes, I have a variety of hobbies because I like doing different things at different times.

The phrase 'the different things' incorrectly uses the definite article 'the'. Use 'different things' without an article to indicate a non-specific variety. Also 'as' is acceptable but 'because' clarifies cause; keep tense/purpose consistent.

× I I'll prefer painting, dancing, umm playing guitar and even stitching clothes.

✓ I prefer painting, dancing, playing the guitar, and even stitching clothes.

Remove the duplicated 'I I'll'. 'Prefer' is a stative verb used in simple present to state general preference. Use 'playing the guitar' (include the article for an instrument) and use parallel structure with commas and 'and'.

× So I am a multi hobby person.

✓ So I am a person with many hobbies.

'Multi hobby person' is non-standard. Use 'a person with many hobbies' or 'a multi-hobby person' with a hyphen; the suggested correction is more natural and grammatically correct.

× While I was a child, I always tried new things from painting, dancing to uh, playing with my friends in the evening and spending time with my family.

✓ When I was a child, I always tried new things, from painting and dancing to playing with my friends in the evening and spending time with my family.

Use 'When I was a child' rather than 'While I was a child' for this context. The list needs parallel structure: 'from X and Y to Z'. Maintain past tense 'tried' is correct. Remove filler 'uh'.

× Yes, I love painting. Ever since I was a child, I used to carry a sketchbook along with me wherever I go and the same thing is with me now as a adult.

✓ Yes, I love painting. Ever since I was a child, I used to carry a sketchbook with me wherever I went, and it is the same now that I am an adult.

Mixing past habit 'used to' with present 'go' is incorrect: change 'go' to past 'went'. 'Along with me' is redundant; 'with me' is sufficient. 'as a adult' should be 'as an adult' or 'that I am an adult'.

× I always try to paint whenever in. I always try to paint in my leisure time.

✓ I always try to paint whenever I have free time. I always try to paint in my leisure time.

The fragment 'whenever in' is incomplete; replace with 'whenever I have free time'. The second sentence is acceptable; keep either one for clarity or use both as shown.

× I know everyone of us have their own different hobbies, like I love painting but my brother likes working on computer whereas my mother likes stitching clothes and my father like uh listening to music.

✓ I know every one of us has our own different hobbies: I love painting, my brother likes working on the computer, my mother likes stitching clothes, and my father likes listening to music.

Use 'every one of us has' (singular subject agreement). 'Their' can be acceptable but better 'our' for collective. 'Working on computer' needs 'the computer' or 'working on computers' and 'my father like' should be 'likes' to match third person singular. Remove filler 'uh'.

× So we all have a different hobbies and interest.

✓ So we all have different hobbies and interests.

The article 'a' should not be used before plural 'hobbies'. Both 'hobbies' and 'interests' should be plural to agree and be parallel.