Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar errors (e.g., "motivation to garden plants" → "inspired me to garden"; "Now also I have" → "I now have"). Avoid repeating childhood information here.

Ejemplo: I enjoy gardening. My grandfather inspired me to start when I was a child, and I still grow plants now: a rose and an aloe vera in my flat in the UK. I find caring for them relaxing and it brightens my home.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and improve sentence variety. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, "because" or "so") to explain details. Use past tense consistently and combine short repeated clauses into smoother phrases (e.g., "I used to water and plant them").

Ejemplo: Yes, gardening was my main hobby as a child because my grandfather taught me. I used to water and plant seedlings with him, and he showed me how to look after different plants, which taught me patience and responsibility.

Sugerencia: Make the answer more natural and precise. Start with a clear topic sentence, use a specific timeframe, and avoid vague phrases like "I know more about." Instead give a concrete example of a skill or result. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I've been gardening since 2005 and I still enjoy it. Over the years I've learned how to plant and care for trees, for example pruning a young apple tree to help it grow strong and produce fruit.

Sugerencia: Organize the answer: start with a clear statement, then compare and give one or two specific examples using linking words (e.g., "however", "for instance"). Fix grammar ("everyone has", "my brother is quite different"). Avoid long run-on sentences.

Ejemplo: No, everyone has different hobbies. For instance, my grandfather and I both enjoy gardening; however, my brother prefers driving and spends most of his free time learning about cars, while my parents have other interests such as reading and cooking.

× My grandfather is my motivation to garden plants.

✓ My grandfather is my motivation for gardening.

Incorrect preposition and wording: 'motivation to garden plants' is awkward. Use 'motivation for gardening' or 'motivated me to garden'. Also 'garden plants' is redundant. Suggestion: use 'motivated me to garden' or 'my motivation for gardening' to be natural.

× Now also I have two plants in UK, one is rose plant and one is aloe Vera.

✓ I currently have two plants in the UK: a rose plant and an aloe vera plant.

Plural and article errors: 'two plants in UK' lacks article 'the'. 'one is rose plant' needs an article and consistent noun forms. Use 'a rose plant and an aloe vera plant' and 'currently' fits better than 'now also'.

× Also. I used to do gardening with my grandfather.

✓ Also, I used to garden with my grandfather.

Punctuation and verb form: 'used to do gardening' is acceptable but wordy; 'used to garden' is more natural. Also replace the period after 'Also' with a comma.

× I used to water them and I used to plant it and and he showed me and he taught me how to treat them very well.

✓ I used to water them and plant them, and he showed and taught me how to care for them properly.

Pronoun inconsistency: 'them' and 'it' are mixed for plants (plural), so use 'them' consistently. Also 'treat them' is unclear; use 'care for them'. Remove duplicate 'and'. Combine verbs for clarity.

× Yes, garden is the hobby that I used to do in my childhood and I'm doing currently also.

✓ Yes, gardening is the hobby I had in my childhood and I still do it now.

Subject-verb and noun form: 'garden is the hobby' should be 'gardening is the hobby' (gerund as noun). 'used to do in my childhood' is correct but awkward; 'I had in my childhood' plus 'I still do it now' matches present continuous meaning. 'I'm doing currently also' is ungrammatical word order.

× I have been gardening since 2005 and I know how to treat them well and I know more about planting trees and how to grow them properly.

✓ I have been gardening since 2005, and I know how to care for plants well. I also know a lot about planting trees and how to grow them properly.

Verb choice and wording: 'treat them well' is better as 'care for plants well'. 'I know more about' is vague; use 'I also know a lot about'. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× No everyone have different hobbies but my grandfather and I have same hobbies but my brother he is quite different from us he likes driving and he that is his most time consuming hobby and his passion and my father and mother they have different hobbies.

✓ No, everyone has different hobbies. My grandfather and I share the same hobby, but my brother is quite different: he likes driving, which is his most time-consuming hobby and his passion. My father and mother have different hobbies as well.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement 'everyone have' should be 'everyone has'. Missing articles and punctuation create run-on sentence. 'have same hobbies' needs 'share the same hobby' or 'have the same hobby'. Remove redundant pronouns 'he' and 'they'. Use hyphen in 'time-consuming'. Break into sentences for clarity.