Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct verb tenses; include a clear topic sentence, then 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'I love' repeated).

Ejemplo: Yes. My main hobbies are reading and gardening. For example, I usually read romance and fantasy novels because I enjoy exploring imaginary worlds, and I often spend weekend mornings watering the plants in my courtyard to relax.

Sugerencia: Use past tense consistently and structure the answer: state the hobby, then give a specific example and a short reflection. Remove filler words like 'like' and 'was my favorite' repeated.

Ejemplo: Yes. As a child, I enjoyed making mud cakes and playing outdoors. For example, my friends and I would shape cakes on wooden boards and decorate them with flowers and leaves, which helped us be creative and have fun together.

Sugerencia: Finish sentences and avoid hesitations; use present perfect or past simple correctly when comparing past and present. Provide a clear consequence or current status. Be specific about methods or memories if relevant.

Ejemplo: Yes. I have loved fishing since childhood, although now I rarely have time for it. We lived near a pond, so during the rainy season we often caught small fish with simple nets, which was one of my fondest summer memories.

Sugerencia: Provide a concise topic sentence then give 1–2 contrasting examples with linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'however'). Avoid vague phrases ('and all') and repetition. Clarify which hobbies you do/don't share.

Ejemplo: Not really. For example, my brother enjoys drawing and learning about vehicle mechanics, whereas I prefer reading and gardening. My mother likes cooking and my father enjoys cleaning, so our interests are quite different.

× Yes absolutely.

✓ Yes, absolutely.

Missing comma after introductory adverb makes sentence awkward; add a comma for correct punctuation and natural speech rhythm.

× Whenever I have free time I'll read books mostly based on romance and fantasy because I like the imaginary world more than the reality and also I like to walk through my garden in the courtyard and water the plants.

✓ Whenever I have free time, I read books mostly about romance and fantasy because I prefer the imaginary world to reality, and I also like walking through the courtyard garden and watering the plants.

Tense consistency and gerund use: use simple present 'I read' for habitual actions, use 'about' instead of 'based on', use 'prefer ... to ...' for comparisons, and use gerund forms 'walking' and 'watering' for activities. Also add commas for clarity.

× Yes, as a child I love playing a lot.

✓ Yes, as a child I loved playing a lot.

The sentence refers to past time 'as a child', so the verb should be past tense 'loved' not present 'love' to maintain tense consistency.

× Like I love to play with mud and making mud cakes was my favorite hobby back then.

✓ I loved to play with mud, and making mud cakes was my favorite hobby back then.

Tense consistency: change 'love' to past 'loved' to match 'was'. Also separate clauses with a comma and keep 'making' as gerund for the activity.

× I also had friends and we shared the boards and made like beautiful outputs from that, decorated with flowers and leaves.

✓ I also had friends, and we shared boards and made beautiful things, decorating them with flowers and leaves.

Awkward pronoun 'that' and filler 'like' should be removed; 'boards' without 'the' fits general meaning, and use 'things' and 'decorating them' to clarify what was decorated.

× Yes, I loved fishing when I was a child but as an adult I rarely get any time to go for fishing.

✓ Yes, I loved fishing when I was a child, but as an adult I rarely get time to go fishing.

Reduce redundancy 'go for fishing' -> 'go fishing'; 'rarely get time' is more natural than 'get any time to' and maintain comma before 'but'.

× Uh, so we had our house located close to a pond and when it was in the rainy season there are beautiful fishes and we used to catch them with.

✓ We had our house near a pond, and in the rainy season there were beautiful fish that we used to catch.

Tense consistency: past 'were' not present 'are'; 'fish' is plural but 'fishes' is usually 'fish' in this context; 'used to catch them with' is incomplete—remove 'with' and restructure to complete the clause.

× Absolutely not, because, uh, my brother loves to draw and paint and also he's interested in some mechanical concepts of vehicles and all.

✓ Absolutely not, because my brother loves to draw and paint, and he's also interested in mechanical concepts related to vehicles.

Remove filler 'uh' and 'and all'; add comma for clarity and reorder 'also' to sound natural. 'Mechanical concepts of vehicles' -> 'mechanical concepts related to vehicles' for correctness.

× I do not like that field.

✓ I do not like that field.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. (Included for completeness.)

× So I'm entirely different from him.

✓ So I'm completely different from him.

'Entirely' is grammatical but 'completely' is more natural here; this is a stylistic suggestion rather than a grammatical correction.

× And also my mother loves cooking and my father loves cleaning a lot.

✓ My mother loves cooking, and my father enjoys cleaning a lot.

Remove leading 'And' at sentence start for formality; 'enjoys' is more natural with 'cleaning'; add comma before 'and' to join clauses.