Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 用词和句子结构要更自然、简洁，避免填充词（umm, uh）和语法错误。回答先直接给出主题句，然后用1-2个简洁的并列或因果句补充细节，注意主谓一致和动词形式。比如把“I usually work”改成“I usually walk”或“I walk a lot”；把“It make me very relaxed”改为“It makes me very relaxed”。

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I live close to my school, so I usually walk to and from school every day, and I also enjoy strolling around the city in my free time to relax and enjoy the sights.

Sugerencia: 回答不够清晰且多处语法错误。应直接回应过去习惯（Yes/No），然后给出具体原因或情景。避免使用不必要的问题句和错误短语，注意时态和代词用法（e.g. 'when I was a child', 'my parents worried about me'）。

Ejemplo: Not really. When I was a child I mostly played near my home with my friends because my parents worried about my safety, so I rarely went for long walks on my own.

Sugerencia: 回答内容有想法但表达混乱，存在词汇搭配和逻辑错误（如 'eradicate our precious' 不合适）。应用清晰的连接词（such as, for example）列举具体原因：空气、景色、放松、运动等，并用恰当词汇描述自然景观。

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because they can get fresh air and beautiful scenery. For example, parks have flowers, trees and birds, which help people relax and exercise away from city noise.

Sugerencia: 结构较好但语气不够流畅，去掉填充词并用更自然的短语连接想法。可以先给出地点，再用2句具体描述为什么喜欢那里，注意动词形式一致（e.g. 'breathe fresh air', 'watch birds flying').

Ejemplo: I'd like to take a long walk in Qingdao because it's a coastal city. I could stroll along the seafront, breathe the fresh air and watch the birds, which would make me very happy.

Sugerencia: 回答包含信息但表述重复且句子不完整。用过去时描述最近一次经历，避免重复词（'trees there are many trees'），补全感受句（e.g. 'I felt relaxed'). 可添加一两个具体细节（rowing, scenery）。

Ejemplo: Recently I walked to Shell Lake in Nanjing, which is near my school. It has a large lake where you can row boats, and the surrounding trees and flowers made me feel relaxed.

× Yes I usually work umm, I live near my school so I can walk to school and go back home uh, on foot and in my uh rest time I like to walk around the city to see the landscapes of the city. It make me very relaxed.

✓ Yes. I usually walk. I live near my school, so I can walk to school and go back home on foot. In my free time I like to walk around the city to see the city’s landscapes. It makes me very relaxed.

句子中多处动词时态和动词形式不当："work" 应为表示经常步行的动词 "walk"；"rest time" 用词不自然，改为 "free time"；最后一句主语是 it，应使用第三人称单数动词形式 "makes"。建议注意主谓一致和使用恰当动词表达习惯动作。

× Why was a child I didn't offer the last time to have a walk? Because I always play near my home with other peers and I can't go very fast because my parents are worried to me.

✓ When I was a child, I didn’t often go for walks. I always played near my home with other children, and I couldn’t go far because my parents were worried about me.

原句时态和句子结构混乱：应使用过去时描述童年经历（was → when I was; play → played; can't → couldn't; parents are worried to me → parents were worried about me）。另外 'offer the last time' 无意义，改为 'didn’t often go for walks' 更符合语境。建议整理时间状语位置并统一使用过去时。

× Umm, in the park we can take the fresh air and there are many fantastic landscapes, uh, fantastic views. Umm, the flowers, the blossom flowers, the wild animals or others can eradicate our precious.

✓ In the park we can get fresh air, and there are many fantastic views. The flowers, blooming blossoms, and wild animals can enrich our experience.

原句中介词和动词用法错误："take the fresh air" 应为 get/take in fresh air；"blossom flowers" 用词重复，改为 "blooming blossoms" 或 "flowers"；最后一句语义错误且动词选择不当，"eradicate our precious" 无意义，改为 "enrich our experience"。建议使用合适动词和固定搭配表达。

× I want to go to the Qingdao Umm, because it's near the sea and I can walk along the sea and I can see the, uh, sea views and taking the fresh air and uh, see the birds flying. It makes me very happy.

✓ I want to go to Qingdao because it's near the sea. I can walk along the shore, enjoy the sea views, breathe in the fresh air, and watch the birds flying. It makes me very happy.

句子中动词形式和搭配不当："walk along the sea" 更自然为 "walk along the shore"；"taking the fresh air" 应为动词短语并列形式，改为 "breathe in the fresh air"；使用并列动作时要保持动词形式一致（walk, enjoy, breathe, watch）。建议注意动词并列的一致性和常用搭配。

× I walked to Shell Lake in Nanjing, UMM. It's near my school and it has a very Big Lake. I can row the boats on it and on the trees there are many trees and flowers and I feel.

✓ I walked to Shell Lake in Nanjing recently. It's near my school and it has a very big lake. I can row a boat on it, and there are many trees and flowers around. I felt very relaxed.

时间和时态不一致：开头用过去时提及最近一次散步，应用 past 或 present perfect（这里用过去时 'walked' 可，但后句有现在时 'can row' 和不完整句 'I feel'）。修正为过去时描述经历（can row → could row 或 keep present if general, 此处改为 can row → I can row a boat on it 保持习惯表达，但最后感受应为过去式 'I felt'）。另外 'on the trees there are many trees' 重复且语序不自然，改为 'there are many trees and flowers around'。建议统一时态并删除重复信息。