Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and use singular/plural correctly. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a specific detail. Avoid filler words like “sure.”

Ejemplo: Yes. There are several tall apartment blocks near my home; most were built in the last ten years and house many young families.

Sugerencia: Reduce repetition and correct grammar (possessives, articles, verbs). Provide one clear reason and a specific example using linking words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I often photograph nearby buildings because I admire their architecture and the way the evening light highlights their facades; for example, last week I took pictures of a glass office tower at sunset.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid vague phrases. Use past or present correctly and give one specific building and reason. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes. I would like to visit the City Museum because it has a striking modern design; moreover, I want to see how natural light is used inside the galleries in the evening.

Sugerencia: Be concise and correct word order and articles. Give one or two clear benefits with specific details and use linking words (for example, because, therefore). Remove hesitations and redundancies.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. Living in a tall building would give me great views of the sunset and the whole city; therefore, it would be peaceful and enjoyable after a busy day.

× Yes, sure, there are a lot of buildings near our homes.

✓ Yes, sure, there are a lot of buildings near my home.

The student used 'homes' while referring to their own home. This is a singular possessive context, so 'my home' is correct. Use singular when referring to one person's residence. Suggestion: Match number between possessive and noun (my home).

× Yes I do. Yes I do. I have friend take up photos of building near my homes because I like their architects and the way light fell on them in the evening.

✓ Yes, I do. I have a friend who takes photos of buildings near my home because I like their architecture and the way the light falls on them in the evening.

Multiple errors limited to the present participle and related forms: 'have friend' needs an article ('a friend'); use relative 'who' to introduce the clause; 'take up photos' is unnatural—use 'takes photos' (third-person singular present); 'building' should be plural 'buildings'; 'my homes' should be 'my home'; 'architects' is wrong when referring to building design—use 'architecture'; 'fell' is past tense but describing a habitual or general observation, so present 'falls' is correct. Suggestion: add articles, use third-person singular verb agreement, pluralize nouns appropriately, and keep present tense for habitual actions. Suggestion: Use 'I have a friend who takes photos of buildings near my home because I like their architecture and the way the light falls on them in the evening.'

× Yes, sure. There are buildings which I like to visit mostly.

✓ Yes, sure. There are buildings that I mostly like to visit.

The original word order is awkward. 'Which' can be used but 'that' is more natural in restrictive clauses; adverb placement 'mostly' should come before the verb phrase for clarity. Suggestion: Place adverbs close to the verb they modify: 'mostly like to visit.'

× I, uh, went there to see the architects and the light which is uh, lighting in the evening.

✓ I went there to see the architecture and the light that is visible in the evening.

'Went there to see the architects' suggests seeing people rather than buildings' design; use 'architecture'. 'Which is lighting' is ungrammatical — use 'that is visible' or 'that lights up' depending on meaning. 'Lighting' as a present participle needs a subject. Suggestion: Use 'architecture' and a correct relative clause: 'the light that is visible in the evening.'

× So that's, I like it.

✓ So that, I like it.

This is more a phrasing/ellipsis issue; original 'So that's, I like it' is informal and contains an unnecessary contraction 'that's' which doesn't refer to a clear noun. Removing 's makes the sentence clearer: 'So that, I like it.' Suggestion: Use clearer connectors: 'So I like it.'

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building because of that.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building for that reason.

'Because of that' is understandable but awkward; 'for that reason' is clearer when referring back to a previous idea. Suggestion: Use clearer linking phrases to refer to prior statements.

× The sunset at the top of the building is seen looking up very clearly and at the top of the building you can see the whole cities at if you want to enjoy that.

✓ The sunset seen from the top of the building is very clear, and from there you can see the whole city if you want to enjoy it.

Problems: 'is seen looking up very clearly' has wrong adverb placement and awkward structure; 'whole cities' should be singular 'city' when referring to one urban area; extraneous 'at' before 'if'. Suggestion: Reorder to 'the sunset seen from the top... is very clear' and use 'city' and 'if you want to enjoy it.'

× So it's a better uh, for the entertainment and enjoying the best and peaceful to watching from there.

✓ So it's better for entertainment and for enjoying the best, most peaceful views from there.

Errors: 'a better' needs a noun after it; 'enjoying the best and peaceful' is ungrammatical—use comparative/superlative forms and nouns ('most peaceful views'); 'to watching' should be 'watching' or gerund phrase 'for watching.' Suggestion: Use parallel structure and correct adjective forms: 'better for entertainment and for enjoying the best, most peaceful views.'

× So yes, I can.

✓ So yes, I can.

Grammatically this sentence is acceptable as a short affirmative reply using the modal verb 'can.' No change needed. Suggestion: If more natural, expand to 'So yes, I can live there.'