Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make your answer more natural and concise by using one clear topic sentence and then one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and awkward phrases like “sightful view.” Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “for example” or “also”).

Ejemplo: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, including a large shopping mall and a university campus. For example, the university’s glass towers are visible from my balcony and give the area a modern feel.

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations and repetition by planning a short topic sentence and one or two specific reasons/examples. Use clearer vocabulary and correct article use (e.g., “the Taj Mahal” and “an ancient building”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I often photograph buildings that catch my eye. For example, when I visited the Taj Mahal, I took many photos because it is a beautiful and historic monument I wanted to remember.

Sugerencia: Make the sentence structure smoother by giving a direct topic sentence and then two specific reasons. Correct grammar (e.g., “its architecture” and “I would like to visit in the future” → “in the future” or “someday”). Keep it concise and avoid repeating the desire to take photos twice.

Ejemplo: Yes. I would like to visit the Qutub Minar because its architecture is fascinating and it is very important historically. I hope to see the tower in person someday and take a few photographs to remember the visit.

Sugerencia: Open with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific, concise reasons. Improve naturalness by using phrases like “climbing stairs” or “waiting for elevators,” and correct minor wording (“on the first or second floor”). Avoid repeating the main point.

Ejemplo: No, I wouldn’t prefer to live in a tall building. I find it inconvenient because climbing many stairs or waiting for the elevator wastes time, and a house offers more privacy and easier access to outdoors.

× There is a mall, there are hospitals and there are also universities and schools.

✓ There is a mall; there are hospitals, universities, and schools.

Mixing singular and plural is acceptable, but punctuation and list structure need consistency. Use commas between plural items and a semicolon or conjunction to separate the initial singular from the list for clarity. Improve parallelism by listing plural nouns together.

× So definitely there are various tall buildings, which gives a sightful view for the city.

✓ So definitely there are various tall buildings, which give a beautiful view of the city.

Relative clause must agree with its antecedent: 'buildings' is plural, so the verb should be 'give' (not 'gives'). 'Sightful' is not standard; use 'beautiful' or 'pleasant'. Use 'view of the city' rather than 'view for the city.'

× Definitely, many times I take photos of the building which are these, which have the scenic view and uh, the one I want to keep in, in my memory and like want to last forever with me.

✓ Definitely, I often take photos of buildings that have a scenic view, especially those I want to keep in my memory and that I want to remain with me forever.

Multiple issues: 'many times' is better as 'often'; 'the building which are these' is ungrammatical (number agreement and awkward phrasing). Use 'buildings that' (relative pronoun and plural agreement). 'Want to keep in my memory' and 'want to last forever with me' are awkward — rephrase to 'want to keep in my memory' and 'that I want to remain with me forever.' Maintain parallel structure for relative clauses.

× I take photos of those buildings.

✓ I take photos of those buildings.

Sentence is grammatically correct; plural 'buildings' agrees with 'those'. No change needed.

× Uh, for example, if I am visiting Taj Mahal in Agra, definitely it is one of the ancient building I want to keep it with.

✓ For example, if I visit the Taj Mahal in Agra, it is definitely one of the ancient buildings I want to remember.

'Taj Mahal' requires the definite article 'the.' Use simple present 'if I visit' for hypothetical general statements. 'One of the ancient building' should be plural 'buildings.' Remove redundant pronoun 'it' after 'want to keep.' Use 'remember' instead of awkward 'keep it with.'

× Yes, there is a building that I would like to visit is Qutub Minar.

✓ Yes, a building I would like to visit is Qutub Minar.

Original contains a fused clause and repetition ('there is a building that I would like to visit is...'). Remove the extra 'there is' or restructure: 'A building I would like to visit is Qutub Minar.'

× I have heard that it's architecture is quite interesting and it is historically important as well.

✓ I have heard that its architecture is quite interesting and that it is historically important as well.

Use the possessive adjective 'its' (no apostrophe). Add conjunction 'that' for parallel subordinate clauses. 'It's' is a contraction of 'it is', which is incorrect for possession.

× So I would like to visit in my future and I also want to take pictures of it so that I can have them forever with me.

✓ So I would like to visit in the future, and I also want to take pictures of it so that I can keep them with me forever.

'Visit in my future' is awkward; use 'in the future.' 'Have them forever with me' is better as 'keep them with me forever.' Maintain parallel structure and correct object pronoun agreement ('pictures' -> 'them').

× Actually, I would rather avoid living in a tall building because it would take much of my time to move to the upstairs if I am not having my room on the 1st or the 2nd floor.

✓ Actually, I would rather avoid living in a tall building because it would take a lot of my time to go upstairs if my room is not on the first or second floor.

'Would rather avoid' is acceptable. Replace 'much of my time' with 'a lot of my time' or 'much time' for naturalness. 'Move to the upstairs' is incorrect; use 'go upstairs.' 'If I am not having my room' is ungrammatical — use 'if my room is not on the first or second floor.' Use full ordinal words rather than numerals in speech.

× I feel that living in a house is more convenient than living in a tall building, so I would avoid going for a tall building.

✓ I feel that living in a house is more convenient than living in a tall building, so I would avoid choosing a tall building.

'Going for a tall building' is informal and awkward in this context. Use 'choosing a tall building' or 'living in a tall building.' The rest of the sentence is grammatically fine but 'choosing' conveys the intended meaning more clearly.