Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct articles and quantifiers (e.g. “there are a few”), and give one or two specific examples with a linking word. Avoid repetition and incomplete phrases.

Ejemplo: Yes, there are a few tall buildings near my home. For example, there is a large shopping mall and a multi-storey school building about ten minutes away, which makes the area feel quite urban.

Sugerencia: Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary, and link ideas with conjunctions. Say when you usually take photos and why, with one concise example. Avoid vague words like “momentful” and excessive repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often photograph buildings at sunset because the light highlights their shapes. For instance, last week I photographed a glass office block as the sun set behind it, and the reflected light made the facade glow.

Sugerencia: Be more precise and use accurate historical terms. Start with a direct statement, then give specific reasons and an example. Avoid repeating words and be careful with geography (ancient Greek influence in Rome should be explained).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit ancient buildings in Rome, especially the Colosseum and the Pantheon, because they reflect classical architecture and history. For example, the Colosseum’s scale and preserved ruins would help me imagine public life in ancient times.

Sugerencia: Organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence, then two brief supporting reasons linked logically. Avoid colloquial fillers like “awesome” without explanation and correct phrasing about cost. Keep sentences compact and use varied vocabulary.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because of the great views of the city and natural light. However, I know high-rise apartments are expensive, so living there would feel like a significant achievement and investment.

× Yes, there's a few tall buildings in our place and some of them are local buildings like malls, shops and some schools.

✓ Yes, there are a few tall buildings in our area, and some of them are local buildings like malls, shops, and schools.

The subject 'a few tall buildings' is plural, so the correct form of 'there be' is 'there are' rather than 'there's' (contraction of 'there is'). Also 'place' is better as 'area' in this context and commas are needed in the list for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'there are' with plural nouns and check list punctuation.

× Like the simple thing, the simple buildings that you often.

✓ For example, the simple buildings you see often.

The original sentence is incomplete and fragmentary; it lacks a main verb and clear structure. Rewriting as 'For example, the simple buildings you see often' completes the idea and uses a clear subject and relative clause. Suggestion: Ensure each sentence has a subject and verb; avoid sentence fragments.

× Yes, actually I took photos of some buildings here when it's very momentful, like the sun is on the back and it's starting to set.

✓ Yes, actually I took photos of some buildings here when it was a very memorable moment, like when the sun was behind them and starting to set.

The main clause uses past tense ('I took'), so time-related subordinate clauses should also use past tense ('it was', 'the sun was'). 'Momentful' is not standard; 'memorable' is appropriate. 'On the back' is incorrect; use 'behind them'. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent within related clauses and choose standard adjectives.

× Like it makes the building look so amazing and beautiful that it shines when it's time to go dark.

✓ It makes the building look so amazing and beautiful that it seems to shine as it gets dark.

The phrase 'when it's time to go dark' is awkward; 'as it gets dark' is idiomatic. 'Shines' describing appearance is better as 'seems to shine.' Also avoid filler 'Like' at sentence start. Suggestion: Use idiomatic time expressions like 'as it gets dark' and ensure verbs match intended meaning.

× Yeah, yes, not in the Philippines, but some in Rome because of the ancient Greek buildings and structures.

✓ Yes, not in the Philippines, but I would like to visit some in Rome because of the ancient Greek buildings and structures.

Original lacks a clear subject and verb for the desire to visit. Adding 'I would like to visit' completes the sentence and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: Explicitly state the subject and verb when expressing wishes or intentions.

× Those are super awesome and and can give you some mythical stories about how the ancient times and Greek gods were so amazing.

✓ They are awesome and can give you legendary stories about ancient times and the Greek gods.

'Those' as a pronoun is okay but repeated 'and and' is a typo. 'Some mythical stories about how the ancient times and Greek gods were so amazing' is awkward; 'legendary stories about ancient times and the Greek gods' is clearer. Also 'ancient times' does not need 'the' before it in this context. Suggestion: Avoid repeated words, use concise noun phrases, and choose appropriate determiners for 'ancient times'.

× Yes, because I can see the whole view from the top, and I can see city lights, the clouds, the sun.

✓ Yes, because I can see the whole view from the top, including the city lights, the clouds, and the sun.

Original is mostly correct but 'see the whole view' is better as 'see the whole view from the top, including...' This is not strictly a 'there be' error; however keeping list parallel and adding 'including' improves clarity. Suggestion: Use 'including' to introduce examples and keep list items parallel.

× It can make you feel so awesome.

✓ It can make you feel great.

'Awesome' is informal and often describes things rather than feelings; 'great' or 'amazed' is more natural when describing feelings. Also 'so awesome' is colloquial and vague. Suggestion: Use more precise emotion adjectives like 'happy', 'excited', or 'impressed' depending on intended meaning.

× And top buildings aren't so cheap, they're expensive.

✓ And tall buildings aren't cheap; they're expensive.

'Top buildings' is unclear; likely intended 'tall buildings'. 'Aren't so cheap' is informal; 'aren't cheap' is clearer. This is a word choice/quantifier issue affecting meaning. Suggestion: Use precise nouns ('tall buildings') and simple comparative expressions ('aren't cheap').

× So that's mostly like an achievement for doing something awesome.

✓ So living in one would mostly be considered an achievement for accomplishing something significant.

Original sentence is informal and vague ('doing something awesome'). It lacks clarity about what 'that' refers to. Rewriting clarifies that living in a tall building could be seen as an achievement and uses more appropriate vocabulary. Suggestion: Specify subjects and use precise verbs and nouns to express abstract ideas like 'achievement'.