Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and reduce filler words (uh, um). Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons or an example. Use linking words (for example, because) to improve coherence. Keep your answer within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I don't usually take photos of every view. However, if I encounter a really beautiful scene—for example, a colorful sunset while I'm walking—I will take a picture to look at later because it helps me relax. I rarely take photos otherwise.

Sugerencia: Begin with a clear direct answer and avoid absolute negative language about rural areas. Provide specific reasons and an example, and use linking words (because, for example, whereas). Watch grammar (prefer X to Y, not prefer X than Y). Keep sentences shorter and more natural.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in urban areas to rural ones because cities have interesting architecture and well-maintained parks. For example, I enjoy looking at historic buildings and waterfront promenades, which feel lively and attractive, whereas rural scenes can sometimes seem plain to me.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give one or two clear reasons, avoiding vague phrases like "surrounded by me." Use linking words (because, although, however) and provide a brief example comparing home and foreign views. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and comforting. For example, the local festivals and landscapes remind me of home, although I also enjoy seeing foreign cities occasionally for their different architecture and culture.

× Umm, basically I don't like taking pictures of different views, uh, if in case, uh, when I am uh, wandering around and I see a beautiful scenery that is eye catchy and pleasant for my eyes, I just uh, take a photograph and uh, see it whenever I feel like uh, stressed or uh, outburst.

✓ Umm, basically I don't like taking pictures of different views, but if I am wandering around and I see a beautiful scene that is eye-catching and pleasant to look at, I just take a photograph and look at it whenever I feel stressed or have an outburst.

Errors: 'in case, uh, when' is redundant and awkward; 'wandering' is okay but filler words should be removed; 'a beautiful scenery' uses 'scenery' (uncountable) incorrectly with 'a' and should be 'a beautiful scene' or 'beautiful scenery'; 'eye catchy' is incorrect collocation; use 'eye-catching'; 'pleasant for my eyes' is unnatural — use 'pleasant to look at'; 'see it whenever I feel like stressed or outburst' is ungrammatical; use 'feel stressed' and 'have an outburst'. Suggestion: remove redundant fillers, use correct noun forms and adjective forms and use correct verb phrases ('feel stressed', 'have an outburst').

× I prefer views in urban areas than rural areas as urban area consists of a pleasant atmosphere surrounded by beautiful and attractive monuments but in case of rural area it is surrounded by an unpleasant atmosphere with an congested space and unclean environment.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas to rural areas because an urban area has a pleasant atmosphere with beautiful and attractive monuments, but a rural area often has an unpleasant atmosphere with cramped spaces and an unclean environment.

Errors: Use 'prefer A to B' not 'prefer A than B'; 'as' can be replaced with 'because' for clarity; 'urban area consists of a pleasant atmosphere surrounded by...' is awkward — use 'an urban area has a pleasant atmosphere with...'; 'surrounded by' misused for atmosphere; 'congested space' is better 'cramped spaces'; articles missing before 'urban area' and 'rural area' — add 'an' or 'a'. Suggestion: use 'prefer...to', correct prepositions and collocations, and include appropriate articles.

× I prefer views in your own country or in other countries?

✓ Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?

This line is the examiner's question; however, in the student's reply there are article errors such as 'I am grown up seeing the atmosphere surrounded by me' and 'modern or a foreign culture would be pleasant'. The student's sentence 'I am grown up seeing the atmosphere surrounded by me' should be corrected to 'I grew up surrounded by this atmosphere' or 'I grew up seeing this atmosphere', and 'modern or a foreign culture' should be 'modern or foreign cultures'. Suggestion: Use correct tense for 'grow up' (past: 'I grew up'), correct passive/active voice for 'surrounded by', and pluralize 'culture' when speaking generally.

× Obviously I like views in my country because I am grown up seeing the atmosphere surrounded by me and modern or a foreign culture would be pleasant to see once in a while, not all the time.

✓ Obviously I like views in my country because I grew up surrounded by this atmosphere, and modern or foreign cultures would be pleasant to see once in a while, but not all the time.

Errors: 'I am grown up' is incorrect present continuous; use simple past 'I grew up' to indicate past action. 'seeing the atmosphere surrounded by me' is ungrammatical — use 'surrounded by this atmosphere' or 'grew up surrounded by it'. 'modern or a foreign culture' mixes articles and number; use 'modern or foreign cultures' to speak generally. Suggestion: use correct tense for life events (past), correct passive structure 'surrounded by', and pluralize when generalizing.

× So I basically prefer views around me in my country.

✓ So I basically prefer the views around me in my country.

Error: Missing definite article 'the' before 'views around me' makes the noun phrase awkward. While subject-verb agreement is not directly violated, adding 'the' makes the sentence grammatically natural and specific. Suggestion: include appropriate articles ('the') when referring to specific things known to both speaker and listener.